Eulalia's Adventure

by KK_Akatsuki

Original Action Fantasy Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Sexual Content
A bullied person died on an alleyway and was resurrected as a girl who grew up in the slums.


Well, I think that sentence explains the entire prologue and chapter 1... LOL
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---THIS REVIEW IS NOW OUT OF DATE--A NEW REVIEW WILL BE DONE ONCE THE CHAPTER COUNT INCREASES ENOUGH TO MAKE A DECISION--

 

Starts off a little worrisome but continues on to show an interesting perspective and plot progression path.

while reincarnation and magical world concepts are not new, many get caught up in the same themes and settings of other stories with an MC trying to head to unattainable heights followed by nearly unbelievable events to push the MC to such heights which our author Akatsuki seems to have chosen to avoid and take a different route.

the character – ex-shut-in (hikikomori) who holds a deep distrust for humans, due to a traumatic experience. once a man, now reawakens to the memories of his past life in the form of a 7 year old slum girl. the living conditions are harsh and unforgiving, and the treatment she receives when attempting to make a better life for herself doesn’t do anything to help solve her new found sense of distrust. saved by an eccentric old earl, she chooses becoming a maid over trying to live a life in the forest.

while currently little is known, there is lots of potential for future growth for the MC and other important characters. a good deal of effort seems to have been put in to create an MC that doesn’t feel unnatural in the setting of the story.

grammar – nothing to complain about. i didn’t notice any real issues with spelling or grammar, the sentences were often short and simple, straight to the point. not requiring the reader to think too deeply to understand what is happening.

+ story – thanks largely in part to the care and detail put into the character development and grammar, the story flows really easily. it neither exhausts one mentally nor raises any feelings of unnatural events. by the way the conversation and interaction takes place, i can see that Akatsuki has put real consideration into the social interaction aspect of the story, which a few (that i ave seen) FanFic writers overlook in favor of fast releases or quicker progression of story, displaying in how awkward the conversations are viewed.

 

these ratings are based on my current opinion of the chapters so far, and are a marker of how much potential i believe the author and their story has. will update the ratings as the story progresses so Akatsuki gets a more recent opinion of the quality of releases.

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great story but becoming boring

 This is my personal preference you can agree or you can hate I don't care this is just a note to the Author.

Ey Auther person anyway I mentioned in chapter 28 that your story is becoming predictable if 'they' end up like 'that' then this story can be predicted from beginning to end. A story is all about emotion. She I write I want my readers to cry to laugh to burst with joy when I hand them a cookie. To fall for the characters. And you are actually fairly good at this to be honest. You could use a little bit of work but overall your good at emotion. If they end up like that then this story will become very predictable. I don't think I will continue reading if that happens not because I'm against it but it will ruin such a beautiful story you have made so far by making it predictable.

virian22
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 I like the story a lot. I'm jusr wonderign how will our MC live being a girl andn ow having the knowlodge of a life as a man.looking forward to reading more.

rockervalence123
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I really like the character. Not so OP yet not so weak but very clever without realizing some of her hidden strengths and fully awareness of her weakness as a girl affected with hormones. :)

 

Smiteodin
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 So TL;DR of Prologue is some child in grade school finds out he has no friends and the people he thought were his friends are actually not, 16 years of self pity, get’s stabby stabbed for some reason.

 

But the story after the prologue is actually really really REALLY good. READ IT!

 

mia12
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Just love it to much!!!!!!!!!

Everything about it is so good I just love it all so much!! Please update it more quickly!!

AIDS
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 This is some serious MLG stuff. I approve. So does IGN

Its really good. I like it. Like MORE!!!

 NEED MORE!!

MUST NEED MOREEE!!

Good job on the writing and story its really interesting

 

 

ChaosHead
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Too much POV shifting!!!!! 

 

It's getting annoying!!  It's like reading the story twice.

 

Your original way of story telling is way better before you shifted to copying the book you said... 

 

When I see you starts using the POV,  I'm just skipping it rather then reading it again... BoooO!

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I read both versions of it and they are similar yet relatively different. The first one had some really cute moments that i missed. The second explains things better and makes things easier to understand. Honestly i'm fine with whichever one you would like to continue just continue it. I know you are receiving some hate for rewriting it however there are still some people looking forward to your next update. It's a good find so i'm hoping that it doesn't end just like that.

~from a chapter beggar 

van
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Read it! It's worth it!

Amazing story. The flow is great, the motives and actions are realistic, and the characters are memorable. Overall, I’m now stalking this fanfic!

 

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Style. The shifting of perspective is a bit rough but it’s still okay. Most fics would write an indication if there is a shift of POV which can somehow ruin the progression of story so I recommend you don’t do it. Just work in introducing the perspective first before going for the action. Also it’s nice how the story goes from one chapter to another without breaking the momentum. This would be great for reading continuously but if it’s updated in a not-so-regular basis, it’ll be a gut-cringing cliffhanger! (I WANT MOAR EULALIA!)

 

Story. The before reincarnation can be better (his lack of depth and grief [after watching his parent’s death] is concerning) but everything after is great work which is the bulk of your story so just carry on. There is still few contents I could base on so far but there is already a direction for the story making the expectation worth the read! The jump from one event to another is done wittingly. Even if this is basically a comedy, it didn’t cheapen the serious scenarios that goes along with the plot. Also here, gender-bend is not just for comedic relief. It actually has a role, hahaha, only a maid otaku would be obsessed into making the perfect maid and the way it was presented wasn’t awkward or just a passing phase at all! 

 

Grammar. I like the openness of the author with the grammar. Thumbs up! The author would listen to comments and do changes and editing  which takes time besides from delivering the story. So the followers are eager to help in with some errors which is not much really. Even plot progressions were discussed. I even enjoyed the comments (part of it mostly due to people wanting the author dead. torture devices anyone? LOL)

 

Character. I like Eulalia! ’nuff said. Personally biased so I really can’t judge with neutrality. Her character is balanced. She has weakness, flaws and would normally look down on herself so as an MC I think she’s perfect! The author explained the MC’s thoughts and mentality so it’s all good. Her internal monologue is just fun to read. 

 

I used “her” because the MC haven’t explicitly regarded herself as masculine. She accepts that she’s a girl now, that’s why he sometimes act like one and he does not repressed the girl he found himself in the slums. (SCRAP THIS! It’s more like he can’t repress that part, hahahah) It was a good touch, making her psyche being male/past female/present more natural  hilarious!

 

But this is just my personal opinion. Please continue. I’ll keep supporting your story!