Death Is a Reality

by Auditto

Original Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Romance Tragedy Virtual Reality
Death has always caused suffering.......


Haruki has always known this with the ones he love leaving him


Now, A VRMMORPG turned death game threatens to take away the last light of his life


"""For what purpose have you come to decide to play this game?"


"""To find the person most important to me."""


Will Haruki be able to conquer Death? Or will Death once again steal from him?


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Harimauku
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Hey, I actually made an account just so I can give your fic a review! At firs I thought that this would be your average VR fic but I find that the story is really enjoyable..

 

I like the writing style and story, it kind of reminds me of both SAO and Ark but since they're cool I don't really mind the VR setting. The pacing is also good. The MC does get something of a OP skill but I feel its's done really well without forcing it...

 

Grammar has a few errors but nothing too bad so I won't be giving a full 5 stars

 

Characters though are what make this story interesting to me! Mostly you use 1st person narrative from the MCs point of view so it's a bit different from other fics but it seems done pretty well. I really like the characters from the story with the MC interacting with other players! Most VR stories I find have the MC interact more with NPCs instead of other players so it's somewhat a breath of fresh air!

 

All in all I think it's a solid story but still could be even better so I hope you keep writing and giving us more to the story!

 

Skorfeus
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I'm the first to make a review ? Well, it's a good story with a lot of potential, I like your characters, your grammar is not bad, for now I only have that to say.... I'll add more after some chapters. 

phaljhet
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so far the story is interesting. Sorry that i cant give any detailed review since I'm not good at making stories like you and I'm not good at the technical side. I can only say I enjoyed the read and my rate was how i feel about the story. thanks and please keep the story interesting.

Barnabas
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This fic deserves more attention than it currently has. Though this is just the personal opinion of a anon I really think people should give it a try.

 

The style is good with us reading through the mc perspective. The chapters were a bit stiff at the beginning but it slowly gets better. 

 

Story is great. Trapped in a VR world isn't exactly a new concept but fans of this genre will appreciate the plot. It follows Haruki's attempts to save his sister and survive the game which gives the story a clear motive. As of the current chapter (17) he's already found her but still inside the VR making me curious about how the story's gonna go

 

Grammar in latest chapters have really improved compared to early releases with a better structure as a whole making readers easily understand what's happening

 

Characters are beleiveable. They aren't great heros or outright evil with motivations of tgeir own. I personally like Haruki and Sylva that develops into great characters without making them unlikeable causing readers to not be able to relate to them  Hime doesn't have much impact yet as she just recently entered the main olot but I hope you give her development like the other characters. 

 

I personally like protagonists like this story's mc. He doesn't lose his humanity. He doesn't become some messiah or demonic bastard but stays within human boundaries. He only does what he does to protect people he care about and is upset when they're hurt. That makes me understand his character and what drives him giving a likeable personality

 

Well, that's all I have to say about the story as of now. I expect the story to go on getti g bettee and better.

 

 

Neriehem
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Great, realistic and fine FF

It is one of the rare gemstones placed among rubbles of coal. Even though the story is - at least for me - heavily inspired on SAO (at the very least the overall plot) I don't mind. Bah, this kind of a thing is very appealing to me.

 

Style: I can't really find things unappealing. I mean, after reading lots of fictions on this site this style is the most appealing one to me. There is a fine balance between talking and action, although now that I think of it some thing could be described more in-depth. However it's not too big of a thing, just something I thought of as I typed this review.

 

Story: Yeah, heavily inspired on SAO. Therefore I deducted a star, however don't think of it as something bad. I like it, as well as the setting you put. Just that imho it isn't worth full 5 stars. Don't ask why, as I don't know myself. Just a gut feeling.

 

Grammar: I'm not sure if I should rate it, given I'm not a native english speaker. Or paid a lot of attention to it. But I give it five stars, as I didn't catch any harsh mistakes. And I don't really plan to re-read it all just in search of'em.

 

Character: What to say, they are real. They breathe, they talk, they fight and they feal. Unlike the 'talking head' syndrome most amateur writers catch. It's amazing how you created them. Only issue I have is that you could pay more attention to their facial expressions. Since I myself pay attention to it in my fiction.

 

Overall, this baby is indeed worth at least 4.5 star. In my opinion, that is. What else to say man, you earned it.Cheers!

Keper
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A solid story about a virtual death game

A good story but a bit is SAOish at times. The story is good and somewhat originally. It seems to be slightly inspired by SAO but with differ the people in a completely different game world. The main character is interesting and the adventures of black & silver are great 

wedubla
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You have to read this, ITS GOOD!

i rate full because i like the story and its not boring at all..

well, i just love to rate full i guess.. oh and thanks for the chapter :3