Elemental God

by krndark

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Martial Arts Supernatural
Azuel is a demon that had lived his life fueled by the urge of revenge....Finally fulfilling his goal, he embraces death but fate has another plan for him.....
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Lynx
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One of the best Fan Fic, but....

Although i said that on the title. i also need to add that this fan fic almost look like Coiling Dragon with just a different MC background.

The magic test, the academy, the rich roommate.....almost like reading Coiling Dragon all over again

 

I hope the rest of the chapter will differ from CD

AMP
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As one of the other reviews stated, I suggest you give the other characters more depth. I like the overall plot development even though sometimes it does feel it goes on too fast but it's still a great story! Keep up the great work and make sure you pace yourself so that you don't burn out. 

Get NTR
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Good but nothing special

Honestly I quite like this story a lot and I look forward to this stories future. But, my main gripe with the story is that it has a generic plot with generic scenes and doesn't establish itself as "unique" in any shape or form. I wish to see the plot do something different than the others and like many others, I don't wish to see the main character reach the peak of power when he's young. 

Ade
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really good actually

I really like this ff.

together with forgotten conqueror my personal favourite!

I’m really looking forward to the future of that story.

In my opinion definitly a must read for fans of reincarnation/op mc stories

Wy? Because it’s great…and I say so

Ok…the story is great, there actually is readable romance and in general it’s just fun  to read…better?^^

AND IT READS LIKE A TEXT NOT  WRITTEN BY GODDAMN GOOGLE TRANSLATE…^^

The Führer likes  it, and therefor 5/5

herotutkun
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another awesome story dropped without notice for no apparent reason...

dosithee
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Eh.....................

Seems like a very poor attempt at replicating Forgotten Conqueror.  

Aonte
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Not Enough Racism by Zed

The story itself is average, predictable to some extent and when it’s not, the story lacks proper explanation.

 

You write the idea and it’s understandable as it is, but adding a explanation, more descriptions (avoid Person’s style) and comparing it would make it better. Especially the comparing, the bird was magnificent and? Compare it, please.

 

The style is weird, it seems like you’re writing in present tense and rewriting it in past tense later. I recommend you to read some guides about the use of past tense and present tense in novels.

 

Past tense works better to describe events with a weird chronological order and gives more personality to the character. While Present tense works better for immediate events and helps to keep the reading pace.

 

The grammar, I prd some chapters and it was average, nothing bad with it as long as you fix the ratch’s style sentences.

 

The character, until now you had not described properly the MC’s emotions and the sides characters seems to be lacking. The MC that and this end, That’s how I see it. I think Yukino said it before, but I repeat it, I can’t connect with the MC.

MouseG
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The story so far is interesting, it has a lot of potential but I feel like the fast pacing is a obstacle. Obviously there is a reason for this, seeing as the author might want the "childhood period" over quickly, to let our MC out on his adventures.

 

Even if this is not the reason, I suggest to the author that he/she slows down the pacing a little, seeing as a lot of years had gone by in such a short amount of chapters. Develop the characters more, the twins for example, right now they just exist to give our MC moral support. Perphaps give one of the twins a chapter from their point of view, seeing their brother train, having their own thoughts about it and developing their own lives. Give their characters some depth. 

 

The chapters are coming out rather quickly, twice a day it seems. Which in my opinion is really fast, obviously a good thing that many chapters gets released but can you as the author keep up with the pace? If you have chapters prepared to be released then make up a schedule so that you dont run out of chapters to fast, leaving a huge gap. If you can keep up the pace however, thats great. As long as quality wise the chapters stay the same, I'm happy. +1

 

Grammar could do with some work, its not bad but there are some places in the chapters that need a little work. Nothing to worry about but I suggest that if you want higher quality releases, you should seek out a proofreader in the forums. It is not hard to find one willing to help, most of the people in the forums are nice.

 

I also suggest to give the MC a not too  easy life in the new world, dont make him too OP. He will just appear as a plain character that way, give him obstacles to overcome, friendships to be made. Dont be lazy and say "three years later, I am now God level rank". Show us how he got there instead.

 

Gahh, this review took the last out of me... Short as it is.

 

This review was made at the release of "Chapter 4: Anguish"

 

~ MouseG

UndergroundJazzEnforcer
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After reading all of the currently released chapters of this novel, I just wanted to say that I truly enjoy reading this story! Its a very good and well written novel, and you are really missing out if you haven't read this already!

NumNum
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Yet another reincarnation story AND I LOVE IT!