Avalon

by croppingprince8

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The Godsman were a secret group of 5 men who controlled the entire world with an iron fist.

One them broke the rules and lost something more precious to him than life itself. He gets another chance at life, and is determined to redeem himself.
In a world completely alien to his own and he starts one of greatest epics of all time. In the mystical lands of Avalon his journey starts again.


(cover pic: original http://sandara.deviantart.com/art/betta2-183479556. )
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aldrie95
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I really recommend this story for everyone to read. It is an amazing story that will definitely make you stick to this one

 

Style - as we all know, reincarnation stories are already common here. the switching of perspectives is also a good thing since it makes me  know about the point of view of each character in the story. the progress is not too fast paced (except for the 12 year time skip; which I think is not that bad since I want to see his revenge asap) but I can't say the same for others. the story is not too descriptive and doesn't go out of its way to be too unique

 

Story - the story is superb. although the story is quite common with gods and super OP characters (immortals and stuff) what makes it unique is the way you deliver your story. as you continue to read, you can feel different kinds of emotions rising from you as if you're the MC. the way this story progresses can definitely make you sympathize or connect to the characters.

 

Grammar - no problems here. you have a wide range of vocabularies and your diction is not exaggerated and is not hard to understand

 

Character - the MC is as I see, a family man that has no qualms in killing or destroying anything and everything to keep his family safe. the only problem I see is  that the other characters doesn't have much screen time as the MC. although I wrote that having other POVs are nice to have, you mostly stick with the MC's thoughts and actions.

 

Overall I give this FF an 11/10 because as of now (chapter 7), I haven't found any huge flaws and I know that this one is made with passion and effort which is greatly appreciated.

Yadre
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Great story ;D

I feel a lot of empathy for the MC, but I think its more because his conditions than he. At the same time I empathize I really hope he forgive his father/nothing (the king) but only bc  his mother would be WAY happier if he does. Idk I think I feel sorry for his father too >all three I guess..

>>only thing is the repeting plot thing where characters do things just cuz (boredom.......) that gets old.

Hope the MC don't get cocky as he is really powerfull but also hope you don't make him a saint

aaanyway

Thanks for posting this story and that's all :)

Reneul
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 This story cannot be described  by anything but GREAT.

Normally I would’nt praise someone this much but I gotta say this is a fine piece of work.The revenge theme in particular is something that any reader can directly connect and feel the protagonists anger.The start was a good one and introduced to us the MC in a sad but absolutely satisfying way.Though I have to admit there were a lot of grammatical mistakes which sometimes made it really hard to understand what the author tried to tell us.

 The third part of the prologue with the daughter’s point of view made me a bit impatient because at that time I was so Hyped up that I could’nt wait for the main story to begin.

This Story was able to succesfully get over the most difficult part which a FF can face which is a goal for the Protagonist.A goal is important exactly because it gives the story a realistic approach.Without that realistic element most readers wont really care about the story.However in this story the reader continually comes back for more and awaits the next chapter with great anticipation.

 

The Style,Story, and Character have no problem at all.As for the minor problems with grammar ,the author can overcome them by simply getting a proof reader.

This is my review for the 10 chapters so far.

Thanks for the good work and keep it coming :)

 

Abyssdarkfire
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great story really getting into it.

For what the queen did to his mother he should retaliate  by exiling her sons torturing and then killing her father. removing his own incompetent father who happens to be her husband and king from the throne. He also make the queen his own personal dog because death would be to much of a reward for her. 

Gibster
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This story so far has been full of interesting and well though out characters.  The plot is smooth, makes sense, and is immensely enjoyable.  The author has obviously put a lot of thought into the writing of this novel because of all the references to things that exist in real life.  

 

I can tell that this story will turn out to be a revenge story on par with Quentin Tarintino's films.  I hate the perpetrators, I emphasize with the victims, and I can feel the anger of the avenger.  The main character is smart, and it reads like he is which is something that I can't say for other stories that claim that their MC is intelligent.  Charm, charisma, and nobility practically ooze out of the screen as I read about him.  I enjoy it a lot.

 

There are very minor errors in spelling sometimes due to typos, but other than that the writing is impeccable.  

Some thoughts on the plot  **spoilers**

I'm interested to know if his daughter will ever find out how much he loved her.  I am curious to see how the protagonist can his his mother when his elements don't consist of anything that seem to be capable of healing.   Will the wife of the king ever have her backstory delved into to explain how deranged she is because currently it seems a bit stereotypical.  

 

Thank you for writing.  You have improved the quality of this website by sharing your story.

 

 

Maxmeteor
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As good as anything out there

Probably one of the best novels on this site. The grammar and spelling are impeccable, the story and characters are almost real, and in general this story is completely an iridescent gem. Absolutely a must read.

Luneth
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Today I simply wanted to thank you for writing such a great and entertaining story reminiscent of great wuxia and xanxia novels. Your world building and your protagonist’s back story are truly great and make the reading all the more pleasurable and enthralling. Your magic system seems to have great potential and I can’t wait for it to be further developed during his school life period. In all you have created a fantastic world, written a captivating tale of revenge and attainment of power. This FF has amazing potential and I can only ask for you to continue writing and keep posting your chapters ;D

Finally thx for dedicating your time to doing this it has truly been a pleasure reading this ff and I hope to continue doing so for a long time ;)

jai
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This ff has really captured my interest. The storyline is pretty good. Its got a good start and if the author can sustain that, marvellous. The authors style of writing also makes this ff a fascinating read. Good pace and all. 

Eagerly awaiting the next really release. Please continue the good work!

 

puri
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Great story with a great mc

Great story. The character may seem OP, but not if you see what goals he's set himself. The MC is cool and collected and also cruel without loosing his moral compass.
stabertiger
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A very well written tragedy

As the title says, the author definitely writes a good tragedy story.

There are lots of heart-wrenching moments where you can feel the raging emotions of the characters.

In addition, the lore is very detailed and quite interesting.

Story is great. The MC has a clear goal to work towards.

MC's character development is good. Emotional turmoils are highlighted to readers.

Currently, the antagonists and some side characters seem a bit superficial. There are some minor typos here and there. So there is definitely space for improvement. :)

All in all, it is a great read.