Insania Online

The main char acts a bit goofy/crazy quite often

quite a lot of crafting (monster parts mainly)

Fighting solo and in a group against bosses

Class of MC is OP compared to other classes for his style of play but is not OP against other classes

alot of stuff outside of VR (too much for me) but good enough Stuff in VR to balance

the Race list looong all with cosmetic and usefull racial skills but i dont recall anyone using a racial skill besides the MC and the low flying (races with wings) and the Slime races armor absorb to make it part of you ( also transmog)

Grammar misstakes here and there (not too much to bother)

this story is refreshing since i need a new air after reading quite a lot of op and harem with many to easy to kill enemy with to many easy to read plot, i like a  new things   sometimes, character are not op but quite good and observant  of enemy weakness and movement pattern the fight detail was quite good since i don’t need to see a boss battle that only took a minute or second to kill it and in this story every one can be strong(not op though) and… there is no such a thing like you got super op weapon from drop item that easily  so… if you need something new you can choose this one

Reviews are hard, and I always find that I feel like I’m giving backhanded compliments, and I am, but this is because I am the type of person who normally focuses on the flaws. Basically it’s not that I’m trying to knock down the compliment it’s that I’m trying to add a compliment to the knock down.

This is the first story that I have reviewed immediately upon catching up to the most recent chapter that has some length to it so I am more clear on the details.

Style: There is a definite shift in style as the story goes on. Early on the fights are incredibly detailed and include nearly strike for strike HP updates, near the current chapter there were far fewer HP updates. I found the earlier amounts way too many but the later parts seem to have way too few. This may be because the transition occurs quite suddenly so as a reader I was still expecting the amount of HP updates to be high.

Story: In terms of story line I feel like this story falls short. It’s not that what is written is a boring or unpleasant read, but despite having an overarching goal, there is no urgency to achieving this goal. Given the sometimes rather comedic and almost meandering nature of this fiction, it still works fairly well as a story. Ultimately, in the end I docked points because it can feel like all there is to the story is a chain of alternating battle and crafting arcs. I have not read most of the author notes or the other reviews but there are clear indications in the way the writing style has changed that some things have been brought to the author’s attention and that they are trying to make changes.

Grammar: On the grammar front this story is generally quite readable if you aren’t someone who gets hung up on grammatical or spelling errors, there are a lot of them spread throughout the chapters. There are also several cases where the author has spelled words wrong or even used the wrong words. He has clearly made an effort and I do remember him asking for an editor, so the real take away is the story needs an edit and the author knows it.

Character: I originally intended to give a four here for the author using a variety of non-human characters, and the fact that thus far all the characters are solid in their execution ir not their depth. Then I was going to give them three but after writing out an entire paragraph justifying that I reached this conclusion: This story is comedic in nature so rather than judge it for it’s characters lacking rich backstories and character arcs which would make it a different type of story it should be judged for the type of story it actually is at this point. This doesn’t mean that the characterizations don’t have issues, just that while it would be hard to fix this for a comedy I don’t believe it is impossible to do better in a comedy. This however may not be possible in this work as changing the current characters may actually be detrimental.

Overall: Given my rating scheme and that fact that I rarely buy books by published authors a five is out. This might not be amazing literature (not that I’d be any kind of judge of that) but it certainly isn’t utter crap so a one is out. I didn’t drop it so not a two either. Despite the author’s efforts to improve and having improved there are still several issues that stop this from being a four. Normally this would mean a three, but the author’s efforts to improve and the sheer enjoyment I got from some of it’s comedic moments make it better than a three, so three point five.

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Review Scheme
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Overall:
This is a subjective comparative scale.
1 Star means that on top of dropping the story I also would
not under any circumstance recommend it. I don’t expect to give
this out very often.
2 Stars means that while I dropped the story there are some circumstances
in which I would recommend it, but that there is a flaw in the story that
I can’t personally overlook and believe that at least some others will be
unable to as well.
3 Stars means that I view the rated work as being of roughly the same as
any ln/wn that I have read. While I may still drop a story with this
rating doing so means that I personally didn’t get into it, not that
I see anything wrong with that story.
4 Stars means that there is some aspect of the story that I really liked.
One of the things that will push from 3 stars to 4 stars is having an
element I haven’t seen or haven’t seen often.
5 Stars means that I would/will/would like to/ or have put my money where
my mouth is in support of the author. I don’t expect to give this out very
often.
Style/Story/Grammar/Character
I will only define 1,3,5 stars for these sections and the ratings will
correspond to terrible, passable, and good respectively. Terrible general
means I dropped or wanted to drop the story because of something in that
category. Passable means that the story was enjoyable for me but at times
I needed to actively overlook some flaws in that category. Good means that
I just read through story enjoying it. Final note: While english is my
first language I am not great at grammar so a higher rating there does not
indicate no grammatical errors.

One of my favorited all time story’s on royal road! Hope it’s not cancelled

“So… We run?”

“Nope. We won’t run.” I said in a firm tone, making the whole group tense up. “We are advancing in the opposite direction.”

While the current team seems to be running a skit a third of the time .  The balance seem to be right that makes the read enjoyable.

Overall great read, with charismatic & fun characters, funny moments (though the humour may be quite subjective), and an interesting story. The style of writing may take some time to get used to and the story starts of a bit slow but once you get used to it, it gets really exciting. The fight scene tend to get a bit wordy but personally, I like how it’s detailed because the lengthiness accurately represents how long a boss fight can take in a game, making it feel like you are tediously fighting a real challenge. A few errors in grammar here and there but is pretty easy to understand. All in all, Warhawx develops the characters and introduces new characters very well, the journey that Wargon goes through is also very interesting. Definitely in my top 5.

Oho, então Gondorrer é br? Isso explica a personalidade zuera dele

Probably the best and funniest story I've read on this website!

Only on chapter 5 so far but loving it!  Very fun and when it comes to being impulsive and unreasonable in games I think more stories should do it!  10/10!

Really enjoying the premise so far, some grammar mistakes but completely readable, thanks for writing and i hope to see a lot more!