Revive Unlimited: War of the Paladins

by saba

Original Action Adventure Fantasy Romance
Warning This fiction contains:
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A generic borderline NEET dies by chocking on a fishbone. Yet, true horror comes only after death as he finds out soon after reawakening.
Receiving endless torture he knows he landed in hell for the sin of beating his mother. In the fiery pits of hell our MC will undergo a change that will lead to....an adventure?

From chaotic useless to lawful good.

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Gibster
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At first I thought it was a well written ff that was trying to break from the norms and create an environment for philosophical discourse.  It was at first, but then it grew into the best introduction for a reincarnation ff I have ever read.  Sooo good.

 

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PRESSit
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You die, and you're sent to hell. What's a man to do now?

4 chapters in, what drives the story is the excruciating detail given to the writing. You can see, hear, feel yourself in the MC’s shoes, going through time and experience the exact same way he went through it. The plot slowly moves, and there is a real sense of the MC’s anguish, pain, thoughts and direction. The character is more than merely shallow. Looking forward to seeing where this goes

Payloner
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Really damn good if continues

Please don't quit this ff. Most stories here are cut and paste bullshit fantasy but this is actually something fresh. Keep up the great work.

Style: Excellent

Story: I would say the story is more interesting than many of the novels out there.

Grammar: On point

Character: The character has yet to experience a variety of different situations but is very well thought out and hopefully consistent 

Hokonoso
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Prob my fav FF on this site.

I really love this FF.  The MC goes through things many of us readers also go through and probably deserve our own version of hell for it. 

 

I also can't wait to see what redemption is in store for the MC.  I'm someone who often plays the Paladin class in RPG's so I can understand what the OP is trying to do here.

Mindgames
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This is extremly well made.

it holds you on edge and there is nothing i can complain about . even the grammar is very good , i havent needed to re-read a line in any of the chapters.

i was thinking of giving it 4 stars to wait for more development but i think that it deserves this level of trust since the writer has blown my mind with his creativity.

i expect big things.

gorillaz100
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Its a mind boggling story from the start!

I cant wait to see how it develops. I certainly want to see how it develops.

Smiteodin
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It is really good, and very in depth story.


I enjoy it a lot and so should you.

Asceal
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 Even though it starts off slow it remains interesting as it is also in depth and gives us an insight into the mc's mind and personality, etc. You've also taken the time to flesh out the other characters as well adding more depth to it. As well as this, we aren't given a simple info dump at the start but it is integrated nicely into the plot. 

Osiris
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I my eyes this story is already brilliant, keep up the good work because I am officially hooked. When I first started reading this I was a little bit of a critic thinking: so what another rebirth story they are a dime a dozen at best these day, but then the near impossible happened. You wrote a Fan fiction that is every bit as worthy to be turned into a light novel as the ones on Japtem and to some extent Baka-Tsuki  (though they have some crappy ones too).

NzmAnhDee
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Holy Cow, I never thought the name-letter effect would attract so much people

Awesome, I thought it was just a preview of “Hell”, it’s actually reincarnation.