Master of Dungeons

by Viken

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Warning This fiction contains mature content
-This is my first attempt at uploading a story I created. It is not a fanfic, but uses several systems from other stories I've read. I hope you enjoy, and feel free to leave comments or criticisms as appropriate. Thank you.-

Edwin Cast was your (mostly) regular guy living and working in Kentucky. He had a knack for working, and was always bouncing from job to job as fancy took him. Insatiably curious, he was always on the look out for new or interesting information or things to do. You could say he was a 'hard-work fanatic'.

But with an ailing mother and the inability to realize that he was being shunned by those considered his 'betters', he met his mortal end at the hands of those people who he replaced. Beaten to death on the same day his mother died, he's soon pulled from the void into a world beyond his own imagination.

Reborn into a fantasy world as the last 'Demon Lord', Edwin is expected to rule over a vast number of races, each of which are considered 'monsters' and demon-kin by the zealous human kingdoms of the world. And if that wasn't enough, the only way to progress and make ends meat is to build and control 'Dungeons' for the righteous humans to invade!

Edwin will have to give it his all in a world he never expected even existed, and will have to learn to survive with his wits and growing power in order to establish something resembling peace in the war-torn lands of Eternia.

-NOTE: I'm still in the process of working on the storyline, characters, and abilities that will be presented. A large number of themes are planned, and mature/adult content is planned. The story may also be a bit slow in some cases, so please bare with me. Thanks again!

-NOTE: People have been mentioning the rough grammar and spelling errors that come with my posts; and while I've said so in the forum comments, I'm going to post it here as well. This is all basically a rough draft. I post the chapters as I write them, with only a spell-check for accuracy. None of the chapters are proofread. Once people point out blatant errors, I try to correct them; but otherwise I'm more interested in writing.

If anyone wishes to proofread my work, shoot me a PM on the forums! Thanks again.
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Smiteodin
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 Now, this is not a typical RE FF, this is in a totally different world (I think).

 

This writer really sucks me into the story, I totally enjoy reading this.

 

Of course every author and story has flaws, and this one is no exception.

 

Every now and then you come across a small grammar error  and ect.

 

But on the whole I feel that if this author keeps at it and does not drop this series that this will become one of the top 20 FF on this site! 

shuiko
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Great Story with a different perfecptive makes this Truely Unqiue

This story is really interesting with the flip side being told and from the way the setting it laed out its is refreshing and the pace is very good for its genre.

 

Grammer is solid with some mistakes but nothing that breaks the story.

 

Characters are really good, though obviously we don't know too much about many of them the story has been layed out  with lots of room for that to develop well. (Personally I hope he gets married early in the story HAREM LIFE GO).

Style is solid 5 star, because it fits the writing very well and it allows the reader to grasp everything.

 

The best part about this story/writing is simply the CONCEPT of the MC and the setting match perfectly. It bring a whole new perspectiive the recarniation genre which is great.

 

Only downside is there aren't a lot of chapters or frequent updates =( (which makes means wish for more content).

 

The Iron Dragon
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Very Interesting and well written

This is simply too good.

Your style, your story, your grammar , your characters ... they all suck me in wanting for more .

Hell guys if you ever end up here make sure to read the fiction, you won't regret it one bit :D

NorseWind
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this has some potential well done

i feel this FF is on a roll you just need to find the hill and roll it down fast!

ThatGuy
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This is too good… I wish I was gifted with the writing ability of Viken…

A Cool Twist on a Original Reincarnation Story with Potential to be in the Top 5 on this site…

Very Much Thankyou… Tehe :)

Shikirei
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A good read with some interesting ideas.

An unusual twist of reincarnation theme, with some interesting ideas.

Jottenhiem hime is somewhat cute/amusing to say the least ... and that Lamia, ha, that was one bloody stunt she pulled in front of all that crowd >_<

Dance2urDeath
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Please do not write a regular guy who does anything easily. That is by far, so far not a regular guy. I haven’t read yet but please be careful about the description of your story. It is basically your front cover. It would ruin the interest of readers if its not flawless or maybe contradicting like the one I pointed out. I do not want to be mean without reading first but take it as a friendly advice. I’ll edit this comment once I read and maybe change my rating. 

 

 

Okay I have read it finally.

Here is for the advance review.

The plot is original, even though there are some of the same kind of idea, I can see that the author did this without basing on those other concepts. For the characters, the characters were unique on their own ways and its enjoyable really. There were no major grammatical errors and as the website said, this is the home of amateur writers  so this is a well down work I can say.  

 

The pace so far is well thought of and not rushed to have a lot of chapters, length is good and suits for an ending for a chapter. The good points of the story is the refreshing way of how a demon king deals with things, a bit different on villainous demon kings characters. The bad point is he is kinda too weak for being a demon king for now that is but I can see his skills being so OP gradually especially the earth’s blessing with every 50 points increase affinity to gain 10%. 

 

For conclusion, Good job dude. Hope to see this work continue on and I can have more works to read. Must continue to write and don’t be discouraged by people that tries to give very critical reviews. They are just trying to be smart on the internet, they were not professionals on the literature industry. Have confidence on writing.  Don’t read the negative reviews as they were just jealous of your work. LOL. Good day and hope this review would give a little inspiration for you to be more diligent on writing in this non paying site.. hahahaha that’s the best part of this actually. 

Southmonk
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Love it! so much potential!

Ive always loved the dungeon keeper series, and the intricacies that are possible with this dungeon theme is mind boggling. I cant wait to read more of your stories and how he makes more and more dungeons! Perhaps he can also make dungeons for the masses that adventurers have no hope for passing at all. a dungeon with a combination of cooking, household puzzles, etc whose reward would be mundane enchanted everyday items? enchanted lamps! ever burning controllable frying pans  and the like.

 

Hope to see you continue!

Mirado
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WOW!!! A very good & original Dungeon Story

That's a nice original Story. I like the MC and the World (or what we know until now. The MC is not a total Morron and has a nice logical thinking. Hope that stays so. On the same time he didn't start OP like I expected from a Demon Lord, but that makes it even better.

(Sry for my bad english)

Astra19
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Great Story and original idea

interesting story love it
It’s about a hardworking soul dying an unfair death and before he accepts what has happened to him he finds himself in a new world with an unexpected surprise looking straight at him.

The story seems to have a lot of potential look forward to reading it