No Longer a Game

by Samzen

Original Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Romance Male Lead Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

Chaos Online is heralded as the first 'Hardcore' VRMMORPG. Pain conversion is set at a staggering 75%, and graphical fidelity has been pushed to the limits without any censorship whatsoever. 'Who wants to feel their skin melt from dragon fire?' some asked as they dismissed it. Despite the popular belief that no one would play a game so close to reality, Chaos Online sold millions on the first day. Fight. Suffer. Win. Welcome to Chaos Online.

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AomineZaky
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Can't wait for more updates :3

Brilliant. The only pain is the absence of updates. Grammatical errors are few and they are mostly just your standard typo. If this ever gets updated again, you can bet your ass I'm gonna reread this from start to finish again :3

Azumera
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Excellent novel, the author truly prowess his talent on this one

I've been reading every story here in this site and I can say that this story has the most clever prologue ever. I really didn't expect the plot twist. It was ugh. The plot was well made. I noticed that there is a review that says that the author forces the romance part in the story, but it doesn't seem that he author does. 

 

As a fan of many slice of life genre anime, novels, and manga, I can say that the story is really well made. I like how the author describes the feelings and emotions of the characters. 

 

The fast updates is also a point to look at. 

 

This novel deserves the top 10 rank. 

 

To show my support for this author I will link his story in my signature.

 

hoho. (currently reading mushoku tensei light novel)

 

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+1 recommend

5/5 stars

androg
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Good until Chapter 10, waiting for more.

I'll not pretend I know how to judge Grammar or Style, so my score is based solely on the Story.

 

I have read until Chapter 10, and it is still the training phase... Nice foreshadowing with many things to look forward to, when MC finishes his training. He may become extremely OP, and that isn't necessary a bad thing... MCs are always OP in some ways...

 

For me, I think this story up till now is very good and will give a 5/5.

Will be waiting for more chapters and see if the adventuring phase match up to the training one...  Keep up the good work.

Tasear
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Bettter than a Cookie

It’s a series that I would highly recommend after the first chapter.  It’s  takes an interesting twist on a overused storyline. We have what appears at first glance an overpowered hero grinding in virtual reality, but it’s so much more than that. We have happy go lucky guy living a perfect life only to have his fate derailed by just a moment of blissful carelessness.  Force by his fate, he partakes in somewhat religious virtual reality life. 

 

I would certainly buy this book in the bookstore.

 

Style

The series diction is above average. Most of the time I don’t feel the characters are using the same word characters.  Though, I do suggest the author spicy it up a bit. Maybe one techy character same spam while the other person sames junk mail. That’s just a example of basing word choice based on the character.

 

Story

I find the story to be a creative use of overused genre on royalroadl.  Typically it’s about the hack and slash hero , but this one is about the cleric swordman on a religious quest while running away from the world and his love. The hero starts off feeling OP, but the author has made, so he’s not. 

 

Advice:

There’s nothing much I can suggest on this story except in force the theme ( love, religion, goodwill, humanity, etc)  more.  Also, I ask the author to remind everyone once in while that’s it’s chaos online, meaning let us feel the physical and mental pain of player choice to play the game.  So what I am saying let there be more chaos or darkness, just not too much.

 

Grammar

 There’s no mistakes that suggest author hasn’t tirelessly  proofread his/her work. Though,  I see enough mistakes mark it done a bit.

 

Character

The character feel well thought out with there behaviors, actions, and expression.

 

 

 

 

 

 

pastesh
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Wow, simply WOW!

It's 3 chapters only (so far), but i can say that your writing style and plot ideas are ones of the best i've seen on this site.

Can't wait to see how it develops!

P.S. Hated you for a second while reading prologue ending, great writer-prank idea and execution! :D GJ!

killemall98
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i am not very good in english myself i am only giving my review because you asked for reviews 

 

In my opinion your doing a really good job so far i couldnt find any plot holes. The characters all  so far have a unique personality but i feel some characters could use a bit more.Grammar im not good at it as you can see so i will not grade you in it. i feel like you just abandoned the doctor (just listing something ive noticed i dont really care about this.) whos gave him the game for the most part but maybe you have something coming up later. The story you have got here is nice i like it it and is somewhat unique i like how youve also set up  the npcs as main characters.  just a good job overall i cant really find anything wrong you just provide a good story and thanks for coming back i thought you were gone 

 

Dunford
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No faults to be found yet.

I honestly can't find a single thing worth complaining about. Except maybe hybrid classes not being mentioned at all after being introduced as possibilities. Just a caution though, this isn't tagged mature just for sexual content. There are some serious topics in this one. 

rabz44
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One of the best ff in the site

This fan fiction is a complete set. If you're into a virtual reality woth romcom and drama then this is your fan fiction!! Grammar is good i can see a few mistake but it is one good. The story and plot is good, but the characters are sometimes dense! The mc is dense! But all in all i'll give it a 5/5

sa1880612m
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As I just recently signed up I am going back through the fictions I had
previously read. This is one of them. As I have not just finished it my
ratings are likely to be a touch more critical than if I had just finished.

 

This was tought to review but it was something I did enjoy and will read more of. I like the concept of the gods actually involving themselves. The grammar rating is basically a guess. Having read what I consider to be a lot of stories I am coming to find that characters and characterization is often one of the weakest areas. In this case I vaguely recall thinking that parts of the characters or characterization was 'typical'. Not horrible just not anything special either. If I did not feel this way I would have given character a higher rating.

 

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Overall:
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1 Star means that on top of dropping the story I also would
not under any circumstance recommend it. I don't expect to give
this out very often.
2 Stars means that while I dropped the story there are some circumstances
in which I would recommend it, but that there is a flaw in the story that
I can't personally overlook and believe that at least some others will be
unable to as well.
3 Stars means that I view the rated work as being of roughly the same as
any ln/wn that I have read. While I may still drop a story with this
rating doing so means that I personally didn't get into it, not that
I see anything wrong with that story.
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One of the things that will push from 3 stars to 4 stars is having an
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my mouth is in support of the author. I don't expect to give this out very
often.
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correspond to terrible, passable, and good respectively. Terrible general
means I dropped or wanted to drop the story because of something in that
category. Passable means that the story was enjoyable for me but at times
I needed to actively overlook some flaws in that category. Good means that
I just read through story enjoying it. Final note: While english is my
first language I am not great at grammar so a higher rating there does not
indicate no grammatical errors.

Burning Love
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I've really enjoyed the series. One issue though: as of the date this review has been submitted, it has been four months since an update. What gives? Please keep writing this story.