Artificial War

by Specz

Original Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Psychological Romance Martial Arts Virtual Reality
Fifteen year old Kira struggles with his disability. But when other faction threatens to destroy their way of life. Will he step-up to change the tides of war or succumb to his unjust fate?
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ShaggyScareCrow
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Have a decent plot that I actually enjoyed

 I actually started reading this fiction with low expectations, maybe because of the countless new fictions that I have read in this site that failed to impress me.  Well, I am not a writer or something, but I can tell if a plot is good or not.

I must say, I am impressed and that I liked this fiction now.  The back-story is good, the characters have rich personality and I don't find them cheesy. :D

Although, I did find the supporting characters to be mostly stereotyped, but well, it can't be helped, that is the only way to make different characters.

Your narrating skill is above average, good enough to keep me entertained while reading.  Aside from having an interesting and exciting plot is to effectively narrate your story.  Just like how a joke would seem  not funny if not delivered correctly.

Your english is good enough, and now you even have a proofreader, so we don't have a problem with that.

 

Keep up the good work, and please continue releasing new chapters.

ShadowOfHAvoc
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I like how you start this off, it is a very interesting premise. I like the way you are using VR as a way to for people to resolve their RL world issues. However I am left wondering what this academy is that you talked because at the beginning you talked about new recruits (which normally means a military). You should definetly explain the academy in the prologue. 

 

Will update this later when more chapters are released.