Fantasial Apocalypse

by Perdere666

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Harem Male Lead Reincarnation Strong Lead Supernatural
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Comet Storms, Invaders from Space, Zombie Apocalypse, Pandemics, or the Armageddon— Throughout history, humans have imagined all sorts of ways as to how [ The world would end ].

Global warming and dealing with disasters, such as plagues, earthquakes, wars, floods, invasions, murders, droughts, and battles. Some says that all of these could end the world.

Even the 16th century prophet Michel de Nostradame, the very famous Nostradamus, seemed to know how the end of the world was going to come to pass and prophesized.

But reality was proven different.

The world didn’t end with those simple propositions.

In fact, it was completely different. It could even be said to be magical, straight out of fantasy stories.

Yeah. That’s right! Monsters and Beasts, Gods and Demons all of them appeared one after another and caused the world to end.

… And this event marks the beginning of a new era. An era of monsters and demon roaming around the world.

However, these invaders hated humanity and so they tried to extinguish them. Leading Humanity to fight for their survival!

Allen Bando, the world’s most wanted criminal; [ The Black Demon King ] joined the [ Dawn Alliance ] to fight but failed in the end.

Now that he was given a second chance, what calamity would he brought in his return… ?

Allen: I have seen my land change with my own eyes and watched the masses brought to their knees.

Even though I died, I have not regretted what I have done, but what I have not done.

The world change and my comrades betrayed me but in this second life, I will not lose.

World, bring it on!

You want to see me fail but not today motherf*cker! This world has every odd against me but I will stand my ground because this world should remain mine forever.

Many are torn apart but I am a Man!

I will stand with my heart on my sleeve.

I will kneel nor bow to no one!!

World, for the second time around, here I come!!

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Hello guys, I tried changing the sypnosis as one of the reader's wanted. But I don't have any talent in writing one so, I hope this time would be good.

For your information, English is not my native tongue and I admit that I have very bad grades in my english class, so if there's any error in my grammar then I apologize...

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter 1: [ A Beautiful Dream ] ago
Chapter 2: [ The Beginning after the ending ] ago
Chapter 3: [ The End’s Beginning ] ago
Chapter 4: [ The New Start! ] ago
Chapter 5: [ This was Life! ] ago
Chapter 6: [ Silver Crystal ] ago
Chapter 7: [ Aileen Cahlo ] ago
Chapter 8: [ Skill Replication ] ago
Chapter 9: [ Decision ] ago
Chapter 10: [ I want to go! ] ago
Chapter 11: [ Beetle Buzz ] ago
Chapter 12: [ You are mad! ] ago
Chapter 13: [ Unexpected meeting ] ago
Chapter 14: [ The Insect Queen: Alkrasha ] ago
Chapter 15: [ I can’t lose! ] ago
Chapter 16: [ Limit ] ago
Chapter 17: [ I lost ] ago
Chapter 18: [ You’re not a Hero! ] ago
Chapter 18.5: [ 2nd Arc Prologue ] ago
Chapter 19: [ Organization ] ago
Chapter 20: [ Parting ] ago
Chapter 21: [ A Beast? ] ago
Chapter 22: [ Jack The Ripper ] ago
Chapter 23: [ Chaos ] ago
Chapter 24: [ Graveyard ] ago
Chapter 25: [ Lucy’s Secret Shop ] ago
Chapter 26: [ Monster King ] ago
Chapter 27: [ Lightning Mouse ] ago
Chapter 28: [ Dreams ] ago
Chapter 29: [ Special Crystal ] ago
Chapter 30: [ Evacuation ] ago
Chapter 31: [ Flor ] ago
Chapter 32: [ Titan Ape ] ago
Chapter 33: [ Allen VS Titan Ape ] ago
Chapter 34: [ Level Up! ] ago
Chapter 35: [ Strange Entity ] ago
Chapter 36: [ Vivite Liberi ] ago
Chapter 37: [ Camp Leon Kilat ] ago
Chapter 38: [ I can’t see anything ] ago
Chapter 39:[ He’s a Pandora’s Box! ] ago
Chapter 40: [ Sixth Wave ] ago
Chapter 41: [ Fear ] ago
Chapter 42: [ Allen’s Code ] ago
Chapter 43: [ Truth of the Apocalypse ] ago
Chapter 44: [ Did you not receive it? ] ago
Chapter 45: [ Monster Cores ] ago
Chapter 46: [ Seventh Wave ] ago
Chapter 47: [ Aftermath ] ago
Chapter 48: [ Unexpected Visitor ] ago
Chapter 49: [ Departure ] ago
Chapter 50: [ Reunion with the Insect Queen ] ago
Chapter 51: [ Revelation ] ago
Chapter 52: [ Allen’s Disappearance ] ago
Chapter 53: [ A friend or a Foe? ] ago
Chapter 54: [ Allen’s Request ] ago
Chapter 55: [ Rather Die than Lose ] ago
Chapter 56: [ Monster Monarch ] ago
Chapter 57: [ Parting ] ago
Chapter 58: [ Flying ] ago
Chapter 59: [ Mainland, China ] ago
Chapter 60: [ Thorn Medallion ] ago
Chapter 61: [ Fighting inside the Restaurant ] ago
Chapter 62: [ Sun Yingyun ] ago
Chapter 63: [ Beast King ] ago
Chapter 64: [ Don’t be so stupid! ] ago
Chapter 65: [ Beast King’s power ] ago
Chapter 66: [ Reconnected communication ] ago
Chapter 66.5: [ A Broken Doll ] ago
Chapter 67: [ I only need one thing. ] ago
Chapter 68: [ Ye Shishi’s Request ] ago
Chapter 69: [ Ye Yueshing ] ago
Chapter 70: [ Golden Dragon Bug ] ago
Chapter 71: [ Battle between two monsters ] ago
Chapter 72: [ Joining the Fight ] ago
Chapter 73: [ Desperate Battle ] ago
Chapter 74: [ Another Special Crystal ] ago
Chapter 75: [ Lime ] ago
Chapter 76: [ Men only need a good judgment ] ago
Chapter 77: [ Tang Yu ] ago
Chapter 78: [ Dragon Sisters ] ago
Chapter 79: [ Reunion with former comrades ] ago
Chapter 80: [ The premonition of a dangerous faction ] ago
Chapter 80.5: [ Vivite Liberi Chat Room ] ago
Chapter 81: [ Xue Ling ] ago
Chapter 82: [ Sudden Transformation ] ago
Chapter 83: [ World Movements ( part 1 ) ] ago
Chapter 84: [ World Movements ( part 2 ) ] ago
Chapter 85: [ World Movements ( part 3 ) ] ago
Chapter 86: [ A Visitor ] ago
Chapter 87: [ VS Lightning Qilin] ago
Chapter 88: [ Difference ] ago
Chapter 89: [ Beast Armament ] ago
Chapter 90: [ Cloud Dragon Style ] ago
Chapter 91: [ The end of Battle! ] ago
Chapter 92: [ The Irregular ] ago
Chapter 93: [ I missed you too! ] ago
Chapter 94: [ You have changed ] ago
Chapter 95: [ That name…? ] ago
Chapter 96: [ My Body was itchy… ] ago
Chapter 97: [ Sometimes a fool doesn't know she's a fool. ] ago
Chapter 98: [ Love Affair in the Morning. ] ( NSFW ) ago
Chapter 99: [ …But I had already decided to be your sword and shield instead. ] ago
Chapter 100: [ A King’s mount is also a King! ] ago
Chapter 101: [ Hey girl, why don’t you come with me? ] ago
Chapter 102: [ I will follow you! ]
Chapter 103: [ Blood Ghost ] ago
Chapter 104: [ A piece of advice… ] ago
Chapter 105: [ Gao Butian ] ago
Chapter 106: [ Different Power System ] ago
Chapter 107: [ Luan Eagle ] ago
Character Page ago
Chapter 108: [ Successful Capture! ] ago
Chapter 109: [ Blue Flames ] ago
Chapter 110: [ Gao Butian Vs Allen Bando ] ago
Chapter 111: [ Elven Kingdom ] ago
Chapter 112: [ Mireya and Ava ] ago
Chapter 113: [ Monster Flood ] ago
Chapter 114: [ Promotion and Level up! ] ago
Chapter 115: [ Reunion with Sun Lingling ] ago
Chapter 116: [ Did you really think that it wouldn’t be removed? ] ago
Chapter 117: [ Attack by Assassins ] ago
Chapter 118: [ Unstable. ] ago
Chapter 119: [ This voice…!? ] ago
Chapter 120: [ I loved you… I really did. ] ago
Chapter 121: [ Li Meihua ] ago
Chapter 122: [ Why should I be? I am strong. ] ago
Chapter 123: [ Wings of Flames ] ago
Chapter 124: [ He came! ] ago
Chapter 125: [ Why are you looking at me with that face? ] ago
Chapter 126: [ You smiled. ] ago
Chapter 127: [ China’s Monster King- ] ago
Chapter 128: [ Taboo King ] ago
Chapter 129: [ I am… ] ago
Chapter 130: [ Forbidden Tome ] ago
Chapter 131: [ Skill Robber ] ago
Chapter 132: [ Days inside the Heaven Concealing Array pt.1 ] ago
Chapter 133: [ Days inside Heaven Concealing Array pt.2 ] ago
Chapter 134: [ Leaving China ] ago
Chapter 135: [ Merwoman ] ago
Chapter 136: [ A Silver Crystal under the Sea ] ago
Chapter 137: [ Monster of the Deep ] ago
Chapter 138: [ Qin’s Sacrifice ] ago
Chapter 139: [ Ice Queen ] ago
Chapter 140: [ Allen’s Title ] ago
Chapter 141: [ Sea Devil Transformation ] ago
Chapter 142: [ Elemental Spirits ] ago
Chapter 143: [ Paradise ] ago
Chapter 144: [ Magwayan ] ago
Chapter 145: [ Defier of Death ] ago
Chapter 146: [ A Fight ] ago
Chapter 147: [ True Power ] ago
Chapter 148: [ Dungeon ] ago
Chapter 149: [ Soul Stone ] ago
Chapter 150: [ Night Reaper ] ago
Chapter 151: [ Ghoul King’s Sins ] ago
Chapter 152: [ Successfully Conquering the Ghoul Dungeon ] ago
Chapter 153: [ Do you know want to know the reason? ] ago
Chapter 154: [ Maximizing Skills ] ago
Chapter 155: [ The War had already started! ] ago
Fantasial Apocalypse Illustration - Beware! ago
Chapter 156: [ The Avestan Monster King! ] ago
Chapter 157: [ Azi Dahaka ] ago
Chapter 158: [ Unintended Accident ] ago
Chapter 159: [ A Duel that can’t be Avoided ] ago
Chapter 160: [ Sara’s Decision ] ago
Chapter 161: [ Face Off!! ] ago
Chapter 162: [ Allen Vs Azi Dahaka ] ago
Chapter 163: [ Allen Vs Azi Dahaka ( Part 2 ) ] ago
Chapter 164: [ Allen Vs Azi Dahaka ( Part 3 ) ] ago
Chapter 165: [ Allen Vs Azi Dahaka ( Part 4 ) ] ago
Chapter 166: [ Allen Vs Azi Dahaka ( Part 5 ) ] ago
Chapter 167: [ A Joiner! ] ago
Chapter 168: [ The Battle restarted! ] ago
Chapter 169: [ Battle Royale of a Three Monster Kings ] ago
Chapter 170: [ Monster King Resonance ] ago
Chapter 171: [ Fallen ] ago
Chapter 172: [ Double Kill ] ago
Chapter 172.5: [ Forgotten Life ] ago
Chapter 173: [ PostWar ] ago
Chapter 174: [ Hero Rank! ] ago
Chapter 175: [ Let's go ] ago
Chapter 176: [ Real Family ] ago
Chapter 177: [ Aemie Villaflores ] ago
Chapter 178: [ Handful Son-in-Law ] ago
Chapter 179: [ What about me? ] ago
Chapter 180: [ Twin Princesses ] ago
FA Chapter 181: [ Deal with the Devil ] ago
Chapter 182: [ Ghoul Dungeon Again ] ago
Chapter 183: [ To Italy. ] ago
Chapter 184: [ Dungeon Invitation ] ago
Chapter 185: [ Encounter in the Bazaar ] ago
Chapter 186: [ Meeting up before the Dungeon ] ago
Chapter 187: [ Reunion with an old friend ] ago
Chapter 188: [ Reunion with an Old Friend ( 2 ) ] ago
Chapter 189: [ Looking for Layla ] ago
Chapter 190: [ Layla and the other’s Plight ] ago
Chapter 191: [ Long awaited Reunion ] ago
Chapter 192: [ Dungeon Exploration ] ago
Chapter 193: [ Garth and Aileen’s abilities ] ago
Chapter 194: [ Allen and Mia’s Reunion ] ago
Chapter 195: [ Legend Tier Artifacts ] ago
Chapter 196: [ Long Awaited Passion ] ago
Chapter 197: [ Third Faction ] ago
Chapter 198: [ The Truce in the Monster King’s War ] ago
Chapter 199: [ Peace in the Courtyard ] ago
Chapter 200: [ She did come… ] ago
Chapter 201: [ Who are you looking for? ] ago
Chapter 202: [ Allen Vs the Dragon Sisters ] ago
Chapter 203: [ Allen Vs the Dragon Sisters ( 2 ) ] ago
Chapter 204: [ Allen Vs the Dragon Sisters ( 3 ) ] ago
Chapter 205: [ Awakening ] ago
Chapter 206: [ Unexpected Visitor ] ago
Chapter 207: [ Payback ] ago
Chapter 208: [ A Dream she doesn't want to wake up ] ago
Chapter 209: [ Strange Mia ] ago
Chapter 210: [ The two Allen ] ago
Chapter 211: [ Why?! ] ago
Chapter 212: [ How Lewd! ] ago
Chapter 213: [ Devil's Temptation ] ago
Chapter 214: [ An old Friend's Visit ] ago
Chapter 215: [ An Old Friend's Visit (2) ] ago
Chapter 216: [ That day... ] ago
Chapter 217: [ Mia Vs Celty ] ago
Chapter 218: [ Back to the Philippines ] ago
Chapter 219: [ Lieri’s Feelings ] ago
Chapter 220: [ Ciel Flare Bando ] ago
Chapter 221: [ Allen and the Witch Queen's first meeting ] ago
Chapter 222: [ Arrival in the Philippines ] ago
Chapter 223: [ War against Aswangs ] ago
Chapter 224: [ War against Aswangs (2) ] ago
Chapter 225: [ War against Aswangs (3) ] ago
Chapter 226: [ War against Aswangs (4) ] ago
Chapter 227: [ Mad Demon Golem ] ago
Chapter 228: [ Mud Demon Golem (2) ] ago
Chapter 229: [ Bakunawa ] ago
Chapter 230: [ Threesome playing ] ago
Chapter 231: [ Passionate time in the Bathroom ] ago
Chapter 232: [ Passionate time in the Bathroom (2) ] ago
Chapter 233: [ You are our Hero! ] ago
Chapter 234: [ Home to return to ] ago
Chapter 235: [ Laura's Desire ] ago
Chapter 236: [ Laura's Desire (2) ] ago
Chapter 237: [ Reunion with Alkrasha again ] ago
Chapter 238: [ Reunion with Alkrasha again (2) ] ago
Chapter 239: [ Reunion with Alkrasha again (3) ] ago
Chapter 240: [ With this, you're dead... ] ago
Chapter 241: [ If it's from young master... ] ago
Chapter 242: [ ShapeShifter (1) ] ago
Chapter 243: [ ShapeShifter (2) ] ago
Chapter 244: [ The Breaking of the Seal (1) ] ago
Chapter 245: [ The Breaking of the Seal (2) ] ago
Chapter 246: [ The Breaking of the Seal (3) ] ago
Chapter 247: [ Murders ] ago
Chapter 248: [ The smell of blood... ] ago
Chapter 249: [ Me? ] ago
Chapter 250: [ Revelation (1) ] ago
Chapter 251: [ Revelation (2) ] ago
Chapter 252: [ Revelation (3) ] ago
Chapter 253: [ Solomon ] ago
Chapter 254: [ A persuasive point ] ago
Chapter 255: [ Dante's Trigger ] ago
Chapter 256: [ The New Grimoire ] ago
Chapter 257: [ Long awaited visitors ] ago
Chapter 258: [ Ciel's Birth ] ago
Chapter 259: [ Am I that bored? ] ago
Chapter 260: [ What is that idiot doing!! ] ago
Chapter 261: [ War in Forest of Night ] ago
Chapter 262: [ War in Forest of Night (2) ] ago
Chapter 263: [ War in Forest of Night (3) ] ago
Chapter 264: [ Why did History changed? ] ago
Chapter 265: [ Frozen Garden ] ago
Chapter 266: [ The Kings intense battles! ] ago
Chapter 267: [ And he... arrives... `ΣΣΣ(;゜┌┐゜)!!! ] ago
Chapter 268: [ Waste Management Project ] ago
Chapter 269: [ Blood must be paid with Blood ] ago
Chapter 270: [ It's High Noon, ] ago
Chapter 271: [ GTA ] ago
Chapter 272: [ Maria’s Feelings ] ago
Chapter 273: [ Symbology ] ago
Chapter 274: [ The Lycan Queen’s Indomitable Spirit ] ago
Chapter 275: [ Even in death... ] ago
Chapter 276: [ She will be my protégé~ ] ago
Chapter 277: [ Level up Once Again! ] ago
Chapter 278: [ Rinnegan! ] ago
Chapter 279: [ New Path ] ago
Chapter 280: [ Questions and Answers he seek ] ago
Chapter 281: [ Mina Tepes ] ago
Chapter 282: [ We're going to be good friends~ ] ago
Chapter 283: [ Take my hand and follow me ] ago
Chapter 284: [ Forest of Night Secret ] ago
Chapter 285: [ Huge Shock ] ago
Chapter 286: [ Intruders from the Celestial Realm ] ago
Chapter 287: [ Fafnir Vs Azazel ] ago
Chapter 288: [ Monster Kings ] ago
Chapter 289: [ Monster Kings (2) ] ago
Chapter 290: [ He came ] ago
Chapter 291: [ Red Eye Diamonte ] ago
Chapter 292: [ Scapegoat ] ago
Chapter 293: [ Thunder Coat ] ago
Chapter 294: [ Baishe, Qin, and Dakna fights ] ago
Chapter 295: [ King Oceanus ] ago
Chapter 296: [ Dragon King; Fafnir Vs Allen ] ago
Chapter 297: [ Allen Vs Azazel ] ago
Chapter 298: [ Allen Vs Azazel (2) ] ago
Chapter 299: [ Allen and Azazel's intense battle ] ago
Chapter 300: [ Allen and Azazel's intense battle (2) ] ago
Chapter 301: [ Allen and Azazel's intense battle (3) ] ago
Chapter 302: [ Allen and Azazel's intense battle (4) ] ago
Chapter 303: [ To declare war ] ago
Chapter 304: [ This power... ] ago
Chapter 305: [ You're hiding something... ] ago
Chapter 306: [ Good and Evil ] ago
Chapter 307: [ Danag Kadlaw ] ago
Chapter 308: [ Allen Vs King Manaul ] ago
Chapter 309: [ I prefer women ] ago
Chapter 310: [ Maria Makiling ] ago
Chapter 311: [ Maria Makiling Sealed ] ago
Chapter 312: [ A good haul ] ago
Chapter 313: [ Flying Fortress ] ago
Chapter 314: [ Synergy ] ago
Chapter 315: [ Forest of Man ] ago
Chapter 316: [ Dungeon of Ferocity ] ago
Chapter 317: [ Forest of Machines ] ago
Chapter 318: [ Deal with the Devil' potential ] ago
Chapter 319: [ Trial of Fire Dungeon ] ago
Chapter 320: [ Lama; The Lava Naga ] ago
Chapter 321: [ I need you ] ago
Chapter 322: [ Copying the Dungeon ] ago
Chapter 323: [ What Allen lacks... ] ago
Chapter 324: [ Fourth Boss Room ] ago
Chapter 325: [ Intense Battle against the Nemean Lion ] ago
Chapter 326: [ Defeating the Nemean Lion ] ago
Chapter 327: [ Dispute ] ago
Chapter 328: [ Ultimate Finishing Move (1) ] ago
Chapter 329: [ Ultimate Finishing Move (2) ] ago
Chapter 330: [ Cruel Fate ] ago
Chapter 331: [ Final Boss; Demon Orc, Gavara ] ago
Chapter 332: [ Intense Battle against the Demon Orc ] ago
Chapter 333: [ Completing the Dungeon of Ferocity ] ago
Chapter 334: [ Alkrasha’s Feelings ] ago
Chapter 335: [ Unparalleled Leaf ] ago
Chapter 336: [ People that are hard to control… ] ago
Chapter 337: [ Arrival of The Enterpise ] ago
Chapter 338: [ Reunion ] ago
Chapter 339: [ You can try... ] ago
Chapter 340: [ To the Celestial Realm ] ago
Chapter 341: [ Accident ] ago
Chapter 342: [ Loyalty and Devotion ] ago
Chapter 343: [ Who is he? ] ago
Chapter 344: [ Celestial Realm's current affairs ] ago
Chapter 345: [ Allen's power and rank ] ago
Chapter 346: [ Mair ] ago
Chapter 347: [ The Ball ] ago
Chapter 348: [ Eerika's Choice ] ago
Chapter 349: [ War can never be absent ] ago
Chapter 350: [ The Griffon Tribe ] ago
Chapter 351: [ Demon-God War ] ago
Chapter 352: [ Asmodeus ] ago
Chapter 353: [ What is happening…? ] ago
Chapter 354: [ A Lesser Deity killing a peak Mid God? ] ago
Chapter 355: [ Because this was a Game ] ago
Chapter 356: [ Allen’s Power ] ago
Chapter 357: [ High God ] ago
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riles656
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current as of chapter 90 

********SPOILERS!!!!!!****MAYBE****MOST LIKELY**********SPOILERS!!!!!!****

So, let's get this review out of the way. Story started out a bit cliche. But that's just me. I read a lot. 

Style: You started out great. The whole apocalypse thing is neat. Other than that, kinda lacking. It just seems so..........ordinary. More in story. 

Story: Here we go. Mc gets betrayed by his friends. I've seen that before. A lot. What I haven't seen tho, is that they have no reason for it. I'm on chapter 90 and it has not been shown why they betrayed him. Just did it I guess cause they got bored??? Your story started out as a great LN, but at like chapter 15 or something, slowly started to drift to a typical Chinese wuxia format. What I mean is--- Mc is not OP from start. He fights a few lvl 1 enemies, struggles but gets it done. Mc gains some power. Here comes a lvl 3 enemy. Mc beats it with difficulties. Cool but, from this point on, there are no more lvl 1 enemies. It's all lvl 3 and up. He fights a lvl 5,no more lvl 3s show up. So on and so on. Also following the Chinese wuxia guidelines, the women. Oh my god, they grow on trees. They are popping out everywhere. And they all love Allen. Why?? Cause he strong!! It's never explained why he keeps his super rare skill equip either. Just does. That and, everyone has equip. Like everyone. How is it rare, if everyone has it?? 

Grammar: Meh, I've seen worse. But it's still kinda bad. Gets worse as your story progresses. Wrong tense, past and present get messed up a lot. Other than that, great going bro. 

Character: The bane of your existence. Took you around 40 chapters to notice the people complaining about lack of description, after which you kept it minimal. Oh well. One last thing. Mia. How does she work?? Her father is an Italian mafia dude. Cool. Her mother is a Japanese chick. Cool. Both countries have a majority that have brown hair and brown eyes. How do you get blond hair blue eyed girl from that mix??? That has been bugging me for the longest time. Did they mother sleep around with someone else?? Or did the father?? Please explain. Especially since every time Mia shows up, you first describe her with blond hair blue eyes. 

So yeh, long review. Story is kinda starting to drop in quality. Also, your foreshadowing is horrid. At this point, I am convinced that Allen is the demon king. Great story tho, keep up the great work. 

P.S. who names their philipino kid Allen??? 

****Chapter 101 Update Review*****

Welp, it's gone. The story has died. Started out great, but over time, has become a chore to read. From too many exclamation marks ( every other sentence, really) to chapters about people talking ( 4 back to back about 2 chicks talking about Allen. Dear god). You have slowed down your story too much. Should have focused on quality instead of quantity in this case. 

It has been a good story ( first 40 chapters at least) but it's time I dropped it. Don't let this review discourage you and keep on trucking ahead at your own pace, because at the end of the day, this is still your story. Good luck. 

GriefTG
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The standard Op harem Mc with tons of girls with little to no personality

 I suffered through 71 chapters of this and it was halfway decent not remarkable but it goes through every sin that a harem novel usually goes through.

  1. Mc faces no challenges
  2. Girls have no personality
  3. Mc doesnt even seem to care about the girls
  4. Novel drowns on and on about how op he is even though he basically killed himself in his last world/parallel dimension because he wasn't strong enough.
  5. No mermorable characters. They just become paper fodder.
  6. No good main villian.Everything he comes across he beats easily
  7. Mc is an emotionless prick
  8. Mc is a hypocrite trying to be edgy and then fawn over female he meets.(some are even monsters that he would kill without a second thought if they were male)
  9. Everyone else can't even match him in power even though alot of being are supposed to be alot stronger than him and even if they are they are all female and are added to his harem.

Again the setting is not the worst out there it just the authors execution of the plot and characters was garbage.

Acheron Cynbel
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Started out strong but lost momentum

Spoilers below.

 

Story started out great, Main Character was strong but not OP, he used smarts to beat foes stronger than himself without any random power ups letting him suddenly over power a foe. 

However after leaving the school things start going a bit sideways, he gets some stuff, awesome some fun equipment for him to use, but now he's suddenly one shotting lvl 3 creatures. Oh now he has lightning powers where he can wipe out a lvl 5 without issue. And from there on it just gets worse, the writing gets cliche with no effort at all at being original.

I was super excited when I first picked this story up because it was creative even if I have read others like it. Now? It feels like I'm just reading about how the MC is stronger than everyone else for no reason.

In one chapter he was insistant on keeping his sniper rifle to the point he almost fought some soldiers, about two chapters later the sniper is never mentioned again and it's all about his super OP lightning powers.

Fighting the dragon he went to his limit in his first attack, then suddenly he was able to pull energy out of no where to go even higher, and then he drank a health potion to go even higher, and later it was specifically stated HP only heal injuries they don't relieve fatigue or stamina. 

 

I hate to say it but this story has just turned into lazy writing for the sake of writing, those that enjoy it good on you keep going, but personally? I think this has turned into a cliche train wreck.

Ciaina
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This is..... A wasted opportunity.

 

It started out pretty solid, then it went into masturbatory Self indulgence

fanvaron
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Drifting off into oblivion

started strong and interesting but from chapter 85+ it is just not that interesting anymore, I don't exactly know what it is, but there is just so much "empty" text, I skipped almost all of the chapters 95-97.

I guess all the talk about how the characters feel and how the mc is changing is just boring.
It is just too much talking about feelings instead of showing it through actions.

It's not even real talking most of it is kind of an inner monologue or a godlike view into the character's mind "he feels more and more like..."

The cool abilities and new experiences from the beginning were somewhat lost and replaced with lots and lots of self-doubt of the future. Is not like I think this unrealistic for the situation it is just not interesting. 

Rellian
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Barely readable.                                                                                                                                                       

MadKadse
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The Grammar hurts my Eyes

mate i have seen a lot of shit grammar on this website, but yours is unreadable. the context of past and future is wildly thrown about in there. untill the grammar is rectified or you get a proper proofreader, it stays a 0.5 stars. the story is enticing though, i hope you can get someone to proofread for you.

MrMnds
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First 2 chapters: Crybaby dense MC, unnecessary betrayal emphasis and a ridiculous plot device for Mia. 

Also, if too many are betraying you, you are an asshole. (Helloween)

I know it's not for me, 3 stars and see ya.

Elysium
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Good Story but lack of description

Honestly, i enjoy the story. however, your lack of description of the characters honestly fucks everything up. there were many times that you introduce characters but didn't even bother to describe them and from the direction you're going with the novel I can tell that there will be a lot more characters coming up. it's not hard to dedicate some lines to describe their looks so that I don't have to use my brain to come up with them myself. already chapter 8 and you didn't even describe what the MC even looks like apart from "average looking". Asian Average? European average?

 

other then this i can see an overall enjoyable novel

complexity
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Multiple personalities bullshit

I Really love this novel early i really do and when i reach around chapter 170+ I has to stop somehow the plot that i hate the most just show up mc with multi personalities i mean author write about the "first" allen past 170+ chapter and out of no where the original allen show up and replace the "first" allen i mean the "first" guy are go through so many shit getting back stab also death and comeback in time to suffer again and now he even his existence are just gone

 

If you gonna do something like this you should say or hint something at the start of the story this just some next level bullshit 

 

well i'm out