Endless Online: Oblivion's Blade (LitRPG)

by MH Johnson

Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Cyberpunk LitRPG Magic Male Lead Reincarnation Strong Lead Summoned Hero Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Sexual Content

Author's Note: Thank you all so much for your incredible support, it means so much to me! Great news, Endles Online books 1&2 are now out on Amazon and Kindle Unlimited! 

In the meantime, the story continues in Book 3, link here!

Please note that I do plan on pulling this story down on 4/25/18! I am giving a week's 'heads up,' so anyone who wants to finishe reading the first two stories on RoyalRoadL can. Of course, if you were to check it out or leave a review on Amazon when it comes out, I would be EXTREMELY grateful! - As always, thanks for checking out my work, and have an awesome week!

Endless Online - Book 1: Oblivion's Blade (A LitRPG adventure)

 

Val had returned from his latest tour of duty maimed and scarred in body and soul. At an age when most kids were still in college, he had been fighting for his life in global hotspots no government official would dare admit to, with crippling wounds and horrific memories his only rewards for services diligently rendered. Barely able to walk and drugged to the gills for pain, he thought his killing days were finally behind him.

 

He couldn't have been more wrong.

 

Endless Online, a hyper futuristic game where players could truly live another life. Val's friend couldn't resist the siren call to embrace that thrill and when she turns up missing, Val knew it was time for one last covert mission, only to find that the game was far more than it seemed. Far from being the masters of this grand new game of epic space battles, wizards, warriors, and intergalactic conquest, the people of Earth were about to become its greatest prize.

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Sir Bronn
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The author writes in a very unique way, unlike the vast majority of other authors I’ve seen on Royalroad. Why some who appreciate the finer attentions to details and thoughts can resonate with this story, I am sure others will not be so inclined. 

The style is what sets in apart. Long descriptions and analogy’s onto why the main character feels the way he does, and why he acts the way he does. Vivid storytelling on his background, on what makes him who he is, and placed in appropriate parts in the story that support how he acts in the present. 

The style has a tendency to get too descriptive, or better yet, too through. It’s something I certainly resonate with, but I can understand why it may alienate some possible readers. On a website where the fast paced LitRPGs and the slightly different than the next dungeon story thrives, Johnson’s narrative is set a little to far apart. 

The story itself is one that churns the imagination of the reader. One that brings alongs emotions that they can only understand if they had felt it before. While I am not a huge LitRPG fan, finding the trope to be largely overused as a crutch for a lazier authors work, I sense Johnson has a larger scheme in the works. His world leaves endless possibilities in the future, a world of both the modern and magical. A world of races abound, each with their own histories and complexities that set them in the changing society of the planet. Something I can appreciate to be sure, and if it was any other author, I would say it would be next to impossible to fully integrate the possible cultural complexities without making readers feel like there reading from a textbook. Though based off what I’ve seen so far, I believe Johnson to be able to pull together vital details that will not only lengthen his story, but engage with his audience as well.

The grammar is easily above the norm on the site, with only a few typos that could be counted on one hand.

The character is excellent, though I must admit I am biased. I come from a largely military family, and even the simple interactions between father and son bring back memories of my own. Certainly through different circumstances, Johnson’s ability to capture readers feelings and experiences into ways they can connect with his main character is commendable. The main character is great, though you have a long road ahead of you. Building characters that are influenced by their own thoughts and experiences becomes even more important of a task every chapter your main character grows, but I think you will be fine.

 

Please excuse my possible grammar and writing mistakes as I just typed this all up on my phone.

FalseLuck
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Really good story, I suggest you read to at least chapter 12.

 

I ended up dropping it because the character interactions really bothered me.

dan.paulus
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Thoroughly enjoyed it.  Took me a few chapters to really get into it, but it has great imagery and is cleverly written

Dawn Sky
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Incredibly dissapointing bait and switch

The story starts of with a lot of potential. It is well written and the MC is interesting, a former black ops soldier now crippled and struggling with the pain of his injuries to his body and soul.

The story peaks at around chapter 6-7 when he is desperatly trying to survive against what seems to be an otheworldly being of immense power.

Then we enter the bait and switch. He barely escapes by doing something rather insane, and his body is reformed on another planet, nothing spectacular but acceptable none the less (and ofcause the girl he was trying to save gets taken away from him at the last second so she can be tortured until MC can save her again because retarded plot) except it is no longer the MC.

The veteran soldier is completely gone and in his place we get some angsty teenage bitch. But if that wasn't bad enough we also get 4 incredibly annoying, very pointless and very two dimentional side characters forced onto us.

I am increddibly disappointed, although i still reccomend reading up to the end of chapter 7.

zapking5
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Interesting Ideas, but Poor Characters and Style

I enjoyed some of the worldbuilding and magic, but the story had some problems that made me drop it near the start of book 2.

Character development was not apparent, to the point that they felt noticeably stagnant and shallow.

The various scene breaks, dreams, and flashblacks were confusing and there were far too many of them.

Dreamheart_Dragon
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I normally don’t bother to review or just forget to, but this story is so good that I felt it unjust to not review it.

Style: the style is unique in that it is a story that can be very dark and gritty and in times of fights and darkness it slightly flows like a song or poem without overdoing it. It almost seems to revel in those dark moments. It echos some of the themes of the story well.

Story: The story is hardcore. Dark and gritty in a very realistic way without being needlessly depressing. It instead has themes of embracing inner darkness and harnessing and moving past it. It also has may world mechanics and aspects that are unique for a litrpg and even fantasy and sci-fi novels, and blends all the genres marvelously. It makes it truly captivating.

Grammar: haven’t noticed any issues that would break immersion in the slightest.

Character: A very engaging character that comes off as very real with real struggles and issues. Only suggestion I have is to add more of his murdane habits and mannerisms.

Overall: ^see review title.

Mighty Moushie
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Six chapters in, I was hooked on this book after chapter one. The writing flows wonderfully, the action is intense, and hardly any grammatical errors. I can't wait for the next chapter to be posted, and if you start reading I'm sure you won't be able to wait either.

Ringostrauss
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I enjoyed every moment reading this, I would definitely buy anything this author writes, I can't wait for the next story arc.

If you are reading this and haven't started reading it yet, start now.

qqrty
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I really enjoyed the story and I think it's probably one of the best and most 'book-like' (as in professionally written) stories on here.

It's great in terms of the actual writing and grammer, but where it shines the most is world- and character-building. The world has a rich history and a lot of work has probably gone into crafting the lore. The characters are great because the author managed to instill a sense of individuality for pretty much all of the main cast. Also, all of the characters seem like they truly belong to the world they live in, which is both great and rare.

MutatedRat
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This novel is a brilliant gem I am glad to have stumbled upon.

 

Top-notch storytelling with a unique premise. Unblemished grammar, an insane release pace, and l o n g chapters. Each character contains a differentiable, unique personality.

 

Give it a go—I guarantee you that this novel will not dissapoint.