My life as a male harpy

by Piconokuwerebaba

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy Magic Male Lead Reincarnation

I have been reborn! This is my chance to shine! To truly show how I CAN be amazing! Goodbye boring old life as a loser stuck in a pigs ass and hello to new fantasy life! WOOOO!!!...?

wait, something's wrong, where're my arms? These are... Wings?

 

tis just a random story, don't think much about it, just kinda making it up as I go...

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I hope it lives up to its potential

Going through new submissions is like digging with your hands through a compost heap full of scorpions in an effort to find a gem. This is that gem.

The prose flows smooth and lyrical, the author adds comedy with a gentle touch, and the main character feels realist. This is not your typical OP, no-personality MC with a harem of harpies.

I do have to say that the grammar isn't perfect though, and I was disappointed that the author used the term 'noodle' to describe male genitals. We're all adults here and that sort of infantilization has no place in a mature story like this.

 

I also knocked off half a score because the descriptions get very vague at times. I have trouble visualizing the MC and the god of orange juice.

 

 

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Not What I Was Expecting

Honestly, this story is far from what I was expecting. It sounded much like one of those stories you make without much planning, and the title doesn't do it much good either.

However, this story seems like a rising star in the RRL community. That's why I've decided to give it an advanced review. It's not often that you see something so original and different from common tropes.

Let's start with the style:

The style could use improvement, but I won't go too in depth. All I'll say is that it's rather similar to my previous style. If I did try, it most likely would not do any good.

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All around, the grammar is good. There aren't many mistakes in the grammer department, and those that are are negligible.

Story score:

Seeing how original the story is, this had to have a high score.

First things first, you don't follow rules set by others. You decided to make a very uncommon character, and have them as a male harpy. Most times, or rather, at all times, Harpies are female. With your story, this will most likely change from now on. The idea is marvelous!

Then, your god. The god is also very unordinary. I've only ever seen something simlar in a story of my own, and even then it wasn't truly their domain. I can already see the inspiration that this will bring to writers.

The story doesn't follow many common tropes, either. The only ones I've seen so far are the reincarnation and meeting with a god tropes. You leave us questioning many things, rather than giving us all the answers right off the bat.

Lastly, the character score:

In my opinion, your characters are worth five stars. I stated this earlier, but the originality is prevalent. There isn't much else to say.

Overall, I can't think of this story as anything other than a masterpiece. There isn't much left to improve and, as with all good stories, it left me in anticipation for what will happen next.