Accidental Merlin

by nadleeh

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Historical Romance Female Lead Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Strong Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Traumatising content

Hello, my name is Emris smith. I was a not so normal medical tech working in a university hospital in england. I was sent on a 3 day conference course in Leicester and I got transported back in time to the 6th century England, except magic was real. This is story of how I became legend. How I became Merlin.

Also the origins of the word queen in the cross-dressing sense. But ignore that bit, i never actually wore womens clothes

 

P.S. First story, be kind. also this is not final edit, there will be some mistakes. i appologise in advance

P.P.S If you want to volunteer to edit the chaps feel free to post me a message in the comments

release schedule is looking like one or two chaps a week 3000wrds per.

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Azcheron
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Ignore the prologue, this story is amazing!

When I started the story I didn't really have my hopes up, I just saw it was in latest updates, had over 100 pages and wasn't abysmally rated. The prologue made me pause a bit and I almost didn't read it as I thought it might be another stupid parody story or something, boy am I glad I took the plunge and read it.

World Building: I know its not an 'actual' category, but I feel like it deserves one due to how much it matters in a story. I'm not sure how he does it but the Author really manages to make the world of his story seem alive, whether it was the modern world or SPOILER ALERT (Chapter 6 or 7 reveal I think?)

Spoiler: Spoiler

 The way he writes the surroundings, environment, and behaviours just really convinces me of the setting and makes it so much more immersive. 5/5

Style: The style flows seamlessly, I could read the story for hours and hours without getting bored. I was really surprised at how good the style was after reading the prologue, but honestly, it just stands up very well on its own.

Story: What can I say, some people like certain stories and others don't, as it happens this story is right up my alley, I love it and I would read more if I could. It's an original idea insofar as it hasn't been endlessly redone on RRL yet (like game-system apocalypse or something) so it's like a breath of fresh air. The plot seems solid so far, and the pacing is good. I can't wait to see how it goes.

Grammar: I wish every story had grammar like this. Its 5/5 and there's really nothing else to add, just good English. It's sad that this even has to be a section, but that's RRL ehh :P There are perhaps 1 or 2 typos per chapter (3k words) but really it doesn't detract from the story and is to all intents and purposes perfect as is.

Character: Well, there are only 100 pages as of writing so its hard to predict the future, but for now the characters seem well rounded enough, obviously there hasn't been enough time for any real development but seeing how the story excels in all other aspects I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and set 5/5. The characters are as good as they can really be this early.

Overall: No complaints, it's a good, well thought-out, readable story with an original idea which is well executed. I believe the story deserves more attention and support for more, faster releases.

molenir
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Fairly Interesting but...

This is not a bad story.  Its interesting, and fairly well told.  No real problem with grammar or spelling, which immediately sets it above many other stories.  While the style is largely slice-of-life, I rather enjoy that type of story, so no problem there.  However I have several issues with it, mostly though the direction the author chose to take the story.  I think its mostly a matter of taste, but will share my thoughts anyway.

First issue.  Why does the MC keep going around pushing his medical opinion?  This is a minor point, but as I was reading I kept thinking, ok, I get that he's a genius medical student.  Ah, wait no he's not.   Basic first aid will help a lot, but Hippocrates etc?  And he just seems really pushy with his medical knowledge, time and place eh?  The farmer guy he stayed with absolutely.  Helping out around the village, ok.  But in the army camp, it felt forced.

Weres and superpowers.  Sorry, its a step too far.  This the biggest problem I have with the story.  If the were virus is spread via bodily fluids, they why don't people die of, or get changed to weres all the time?  Are all weres that altruistic?  Imagine, a were goes an deliberately puts a little blood or saliva into a towns water supply, and whoops, wipes out, or converts a whole town.  And the superpowered mages, same deal.  I get that he is immortal.  We can set that aside with hand-wavium.  The mage cultivation though is just silly.  Why are there not superpowered mages everywhere?  What about all the witches and wizards, and their kids.  Uther was able to kill off all the public ones, without problem?

I guess I just think the story would be a lot better if after getting set down back in time, the mage powers were a lot slower, and more difficult to develop, and if his max power was only a little stronger then a normal human.  No superhuman speed/strength.  No weres roaming around, and if there were, they couldn't infect outside of bites/claws from in their were form.  And setting that aside, why can't a person stay with a woman they love, even knowing you will outlive them?  Why not let them enjoy the time they have, even if it is short.  I mean, thats what life is all about when it comes down to it.

Mostly though, I just think making this a cultivation novel is not the way to go.  Would be better going the Conneticut Yankee route, instead of the the secret world, cultivation route.

OwlGirl
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*may be spoilers

 

I was amazed at the plot and characters. I really enjoyed the humor but most of all the ingenuity of the story. I have read numerous back in time stories, and stories about magic, but this one is totally unique. It seems like a whole other universe, with our history but with werecats and magic. I don’t understand though how u made him think he is going to see his “present” family again, isn’t he in a different universe? or does the future not have magic? I am absolutely loving this book so far. Please release more chapters!

Zassi12
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Feels Good and believeable

 I look forward to more havent read yet enough to make an accurate judgement but im hooked.

Eliros1795
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One of the best stories I’ve read lately

I really loved your story so far. The grammar (some punctuation errors but it’s so good to read good English), the characters and the story so far are fantastic. Keep going :). I can’t wait for more. 

Psyren1596
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The story brings a whole new depth and understanding to the dark ages. So far, it has been pleasantly unique and entertaining. I can’t wait for more.

The magic system is easy to understand and the characters have been thoroughly fleshed out. 

Cruxio
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Simple but interesting

+4

Just your standard fantasy novel.

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I don't like his cultivation technique. It is too wuxia-ish for me and it goes against the norm of good old western magic system.

+2

Good thing he is not hung up on it though, but it is still early to see if he will go crazy with core leveling and all that bullshit with cultivation.

-0.5

I hope i see more magic.

+ 1

No skill grinding montage and all that crap with safe zone powerleveling.

+3

He is a healer and it is fairly interesting when used in the story

-3

His inheritance is a weak plot armor. Should have started clean at the start. Or atleast he shouldn't have inherited artifacts from his precedessor.

Fennin
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A good different style of wuxia

So I read this story on another site and I recommended the author to post it on RoyalRoadL. To my amazement he said that its already on the site, how come that I have never seen it? And even worse, it is not in top of 'popular this week'.

So about the story:

The excerpt gives a skewed view on the story. I expected the mc to 'teleport' to King Arthurs court or something like that. But he is in a small village somewhere in King Arthurs country. And the king has banned all use of magic, with the penalty of death. 

Its a fun precipe and I wouid recommend you read it if you like a different kind of wuxia for once.

The grammar has some mistakes but its not horrible, I would only recommend that the ahthor uses different names for his time walking, or refer to it instead of littereally saying it. We understand after the 5th time that his ego has changed ;)

Dractyle
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I see someone has read Mark Twain

Taking inspiration and putting your own spin on things is how great things can be created. Keep at it.

rapidReader
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Excellent stuff, wonderfully written! Keep it up, I really look forward to seeing a completed story!