Eat and Grow Strong (Old)

by Lazy Turtle

Original HIATUS Fantasy LitRPG Wuxia
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore

This story is being rewritten.

Here’s the link to the new version:

https://royalroadl.com/fiction/16922/i-shall-eat-everything

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junkman
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A lot of elements in the story seem to exist because the author thinks they are cool, rather than their ability to add to the story. This problem is exacerbated because some elements like powerups are being constantly thrown at the protagonist. While everyone enjoys a cool powerup, giving them to the MC one after another just makes them feel less significant.

 

The cultivation background feels like there wasn't a lot of thought put into it. The stages of cultivation, the differences between stages, and how cultivation works outside of gathering qi is not really detailed. The LitRPG aspects of the story feel more like a crutch for the cobbled together cultivation system than a complement to it.

 

Despite my complaints I do enjoy this story. The one thing that grinds my gears THE MOST is Byakko. His name, not the character. Having one Japanese name in a world with a Chinese background where everyone else has Chinese names sets off my OCD every time.

 

Normally, I would give this a 3.5, but the author gets bonus points for there being no harem.

ciser
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While my rating is 5 starts, this is completely because we are not far in on the story and I have to admit, I have completely taken to it. It is because of my new found care for this story that I wish to leave behind something that may or may not assist in it's development and most of all, your enjoyment in writing this story. While I must agree with some aspects of the earlier comment made by Drauga, I just as fervently disagree with him. While character development could use a bit work, trying to hard to develop a character would bring an even bigger mess. For example, when we are introduced to Xue'er, we are given the impression that she is broken and that even the shards left behind are delicate. Like I said, there is no need to go too deep into this, but her change of attitude, compliancy, and course of development makes such an abrupt and drastic change that her character comes off as almost shallow when you could make her character SEEM deep with simply a couple of paragraphs. This would make it so you don't veer too off track and at the same time give Xue'er and the whole story a much better environment. And speaking of track, I would also like to say that the current course of the is loose. Personally I like this, but just like a twig, there's a thin line between bending and broken. Make sure that the story doesn't become too loose. Other than that I only want you to know that this story is close to my heart and I also want you to enjoy it's development.

Thanks to all who bothered to read this!

ssddx
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wish fulfilment and a bit silly, but i'm intrigued. lets see how this turns out.

Lord Joyde
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1. Its a cultivation fic and I think that 90% of us here are pretty sick of these.

--> HOWEVER: the fic is not the typical academy setting where the MC is either the top student or the taunted backside of the entire plotline who suddenly or over time becomes insanely powerful.

I like this.

A lot.

2. The fic has a whole bunch of Blue Screens. The author seems insanely adamant on using them. I don't like this.

--> HOWEVER: As an author who has outright given up on making more complicated screens, I can certainly appreciate the sheer attention to detail and complexity of the major screens as well as the utter simplicity of the regular screens.

3. The story prologue seems incredibly unnecessary. The story summary perfectly explains pretty much everything before the actual chapter one. It is absolutely fine to skip the prologue and just get straight to the story. You won't miss a thing.

No howevers for this one.

4. The story has no HAREM, which is an immediate plus in any cultivation story.

--> HOWEVER: I honestly cant really define which of the girls is supposed to be the "main love interest" as there are two potential female characters in the story that can fit that category. Well... there are actually three but I don't think that a sentient campfire w-ok thats spoiler territory.

There is one big-sister-but-not-really character (kinda) and one ... "devoted to and a lost cause without" character (I don't appreciate these types very much).

5. This one is personal and I recommend that you do not take it very seriously: I foresee no sex scenes. There is not a great chance that this story will contain any sort of explicit lemony goodness. D;

Anyways, that was i -oh and the story is alright grammar-wise, but that may be just because its written in a VERY SIMPLIFIED style-t for this review.

Lord Joyde OUT.

tenaciouspfc
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Although this novel has many similarities to other cultivation and litrpg novels, it adds these ideas in a new and creative way, making it an enjoyable read and a refreshing novel without many clichés! 

ivoSF
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it is a nice story with wuxia elements, but they are more a sidedish.

good proportion of main dish and side dish

jwright
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Fun read! MC makes me laugh every time he's like "Oh! What's that? Let's eat it." I thought it would get old, but the author keeps the meals fresh.

Could use some more struggle but this is fine as it is has a very nice Slice of Life feel.

BansheePanda
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I wish I could eat everything too...

En. Having the ability to eat anything and everything would be wonderful. I sincerely love glutton characters.

Story wise, this fic is great. I took a look through some of the other reviews, and honestly was just dumbfounded by how many of them only rated somewhere in the middle.

Now, I'll be the first to tell you, I really suck at writing reviews. Mostly because I'm too lazy to critically analyze something I'm reading for fun. (And something I'm sure the author is writing for the same purpose.) That said, I can only give my two cents about this Eat and Grow Strong in the simplest terms possible.

Venerable Turtle, this is a wonderful story that masterfully combines two of my most favorite genres of fiction. You've struck a nice balance concerning the number of status screens, and I can honestly only thank you for giving us a concise and clear cut blue screen displaying Xiao Ren and Xue'er's stats.

If I had any criticisms...

Nope. Can't really think of anything that needs improving right now. I might come back in another 10-15 chapters and see if there's anything that needs critiqued.

All in all, this is a fabulous story that has a laidback slice-of-life feel, with hidden plots lurking just out of sight.

I look forward to finding out what happens to Xiao Ren and co in the future.

Drauga
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Control yourself author

Idea wise is good,interesting take on the usual LitRPG/Cultivation style.

Execution wise...uh....feels like the story was created by some 5th grader with chuunibyou. No offence,but the forced plots are too strong while the development of characters and background are pretty much piss poor. You seem too focused on the whole "OP MC Epic MC" idea and the story just feels like you wrote whatever whack that came to mind without filling up the holes. Your MC is just running around aimlessly doing jack,OP characters pop out of absolutely thin air to help the MC.

 Take some time to reread your story,link up some of the content properly with proper background and throw in some reasonable plot armor here and there instead of just having the MC stumble upon some super duper heaven defying advantage while going to the toilet like the tiger cub and flame. This could be an amazing story,just needs some planning and rethinking of some stuff.

Mahiro
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The story might be similar to your typical reincarnation / isekai stories with an overpowered protagonist but what really made this fiction capture my heart is that the author is trying to stay away from the ugly sides of the genre's tropes as much as possible.

In some cases, being very arrogant when you're so strong might be how it's usually handled, and breaking someone's jaw might be most character's answer to provocations, but I'm very surprised to see a protagonist who would avoid conflict if he could, in a very natural way.

There's no need to lower yourself to the level of arrogant young masters (everytime) if you have a brain, right? It would just lead to a nonsensical cycle of discords and a great waste of time (and brain cells of readers). That's what I'm looking for and I'm surprised to find it here.

I am confused as to why most authors/hobbyist-authors follow the same tropes but never improve its weaknesses or ugly parts in any ways, perhaps some are just too lazy to write sensical antagonists, which makes me question why they write in the first place if they're too lazy to 'build' a character.

But this is how novels should be written, even if you follow the same genre and have a lot of similar tropes, it doesn't mean that the ugly and bad parts should be copied too. Some of those bad tropes might still exist but I commend the author for trying to eliminate them. Keep up the good work.