Azarinth Healer

by Rhaegar

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Female Lead LitRPG Magic
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Hello everyone

A story I've started writing a couple months ago. Transported to another world, pretty standard fantasy setting with my amateur attempt to make it a bit dark but funny. There are Litrpg elements here but I do hope it's not too heavy and annoying. The fights should be interesting and aren't just numbers vs numbers. Contrary to the title the protagonist will be quite an offensive fighter.

Ilea Spears is your average black haired japanese high school student, no I'm kidding. She will be transported to another world rather conventionally and will be confronted with survival in the wild. There's magic, monsters and some numbers, cause I'm a nerd. And so are you.

Don't expect anything special here. I just do this as a hobby from time to time. Give it a shot though and let me know what you think.

I do appreciate criticism but please be more specific than "This is shit". Or at least use some imaginary vocabulary and write more than three words on why it's shit. Most people can improve so give them a chance to do so.

Chapters usually 2.5 - 3k words

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 Boring introduction - Where is the magic? ago
Chapter 2 Generic wolves - who would've guessed ago
Chapter 3 Glowing Moss ago
Chapter 4 Exploration ago
Chapter 5 Civilization ago
Chapter 6 E X P O S I T I O N ago
Chapter 7 Broken Bones ago
Chapter 8 Death ago
Chapter 9 Graves to dig ago
Chapter 10 Catch a ride ago
Chapter 11 City life ago
Chapter 12 Bread and Circuses ago
Chapter 13 Relaxing afternoon ago
Chapter 14 It's a party! ago
Chapter 15 Bad doggos ago
Chapter 16 Loss ago
Chapter 17 Sibäzäni ago
Chapter 18 Through the fire and flames ago
Chapter 19 Caves. Still caves. ago
Chapter 20 Superhero landing, yea that's really hard on your knees ago
Chapter 21 The unlife ago
Chapter 22 Not a cliffhanger ago
Chapter 23 Sun ago
Chapter 24 The Queen ago
Chapter 25 Woman and Monster ago
Chapter 26 Not a title ago
Chapter 27 It's a roadtrip! ago
Chapter 28 Actual healing, what? ago
Chapter 29 Force of nature ago
Chapter 30 Claymore ago
Chapter 31 Arrival ago
Chapter 32 Slice of life ago
Chapter 33 #Traveling ago
Chapter 34 Dungeon diving ago
Chapter 35 Outclassed ago
Chapter 36 Sparring and advice ago
Chapter 37 Azarinth Leecher ago
Chapter 38 Centurion ago
Chapter 39 Traps ago
Chapter 40 Fire and Ash ago
Chapter 41 Trash compactor ago
Chapter 42 Sushi ago
Chapter 43 Reasons and talks ago
Chapter 44 Newcomers ago
Chapter 45 Cake ago
Chapter 46 I feel like my titles are boring
Chapter 47 Darkness ago
Chapter 48 Treasures and fire ago
Chapter 49 On the trail of history ago
Chapter 50 Demon of Ash ago
Chapter 51 That is no bird ago
Chapter 52 New companions and enemies ago
Chapter 53 The forgotten title ago
Chapter 54 Cards and poison ago
Chapter 55 Welcome to the Internet ago
Chapter 56 Cleanup crew ago
Chapter 57 Loony steel ago
Chapter 58 Resisting ago
Chapter 59 Boss battles are easy ago
Chapter 60 Scythes and Swords ago
Chapter 61 Sharing is caring ago
Chapter 62 Survivors ago
Chapter 63 Onwards through the storm ago
Chapter 64 Snow and Ice ago
Chapter 65 There is a title though it holds no meaning ago
Chapter 66 Hunting ago
Chapter 67 Evolution ago
Chapter 68 Library ago
Chapter 69 Return ago
Chapter 70 Bait ago
Chapter 71 A dark night ago
Chapter 72 Old Beings ago
Chapter 73 Decisions and Ale ago
Chapter 74 Hashtag Traveling ago
Chapter 75 A Guild and a Bed ago
Chapter 76 Storage Skills ago
Chapter 77 Evaluation ago
Chapter 78 Excursion ago
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Easygoing Battle-Junkie LitRPG

There is no crisis to be resolved, the mc is op but not to the point where she will have to step forward to save the world. This is more the easygoing, slice of life of a battle-junkie grinding out her skills and levels from the system.

I actually prefer stories that are just about batttle junkies (or other eccentrics like crafting-maniacs or mad-scientist), which this story seems to be. It;s not a tense story about a hero with the weight of the world on thier shoulders, not about offending young masters and then exterminating their clan, not about facing the entire world. Its not just a humourous slice of life without any action either, though I find it funny.

This is the simple adventure of a slightly op battle-junkie type girl. The fighting scenes are great and entertaining. The slice of life is light, funny and refreshing. The system is grindy, straightforward and(for her)power progressive(fast).

Edit(36 chapter): Changed score after reading detailed reviews abit(especially oinos and ninetails). Though I have a different view on scoring, the minor errors are there, though not very impactful to the quality of the work and are becoming rarer. MC will hopefully pick up interesting long-term companions/side characters soon.

Edit: I think I'm kinda dumb to just realise she has a job that treats magic like qi. She literal has most the skills qi cultivators do.

Artantos
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A tale of exploration and fighting

A very anjoyable story.There is no grand quest,no great evil,no world ending danger,just a girl that likes to explore and fight.By the way the MC is not a healer healer.I was reluctant to start this,because i wasnt really in the mood for a healer MC.But the title is decieving-shes a badass self healing punching and kicking machine.Can heal other people too though :D.The style,characters and grammer are ok from the begging but get better as the story progresses.Overall a very enjoyable read that i highly recomend.
For the author:you are doing a great job and clearly improving your writing.Keep going and i hope there will be a lot more chapters in the future and eventualy a nice ending to the story(hint hint dont drop it please :D)Keep up the good work

Squirrelk
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This story takes aspects from the litrpg genre, things similar to the standard status and setting but gives a great personal twist on it without being overly complex or too simple. Making this a nice new iteration on the genre and a very good ready if you like it.

The writer so far has made the characters believable and decently personality rich with the only semi-flaw, if you could call it that, being that the protagonist has a wide and varied emotional spectrum, which I find a nice addition to any character.

The story is far greater than most in regards to grammar, spelling and style than 99% of other fictions on this site, having little to no noticeable mistakes.

 

TL;DR : If you like LITRPG, status screens and good story and power progression, read this now.

Shakeel
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If you haven't read it. Read it

I love thus story. Everything flows smoothly into the next part and nothing feels forced or contrived. Even the characters are well written and have actual, well character (and I'm not just talking abiut the main character).

There are several grammar mistakes though. Just mispelled words or wrong form of a word though. e.g save where safe should be used. 

Mykesh
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Actually really really good

This story deserves to be on the first page! I love everything about! Don't you ever stop writing!

lvl8skeleton
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Author:"Don't expect anything special here."

Fuck off mate this is better than like 98% of everything on RR.

Competantly written, little to no mistakes, characters thatr have CHARACTER!!(something all too rare on RR) and pretty good world building (show not tell , no aweful word-wall of exposition) MC not too over/underpowered has a cool "special" gimmiky thing but the way she gets powerful with that is with hard work not handouts, and even then, any fights that are given a bit of detail are fairly close and downright brutal.

8/10 fuck you author, this is something special and you know it.

dosithee
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So far so fantastic.  Great action, cool skills and classes. What else could you want from a litrpg! Thanks Rhaegar.

Amren
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You should read this!

This is such a great story, honestly why isn’t this more popular! Writing stil is really good, storyline is getting better and better and the author is being way to humble. I would definitely recommend! 

mac
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Awsome and buff at the same time

Not a cookie cutter storie , I like the progression of the mc and the and the way it draws you into the story and have been waiting daily for the next chapter update now that the first Book has ended i am very much looking foreward to the second thank you very much for the writing .

Oinos
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Review as of chapter 22.

First of all let me say this: the novel is fun, and it doesn't surprise me that it got so many positive reviews from RRL readers. If you want a fun LitRPG with a good power trip with a female protagonist who is a bit of a battle junkie, throw yourself at this fiction, you will not be disappointed. Hell, it even has a training montage or two.

Now, for a more in-depht analysis.

Style

The style is the main issue with this fiction. The story is told from a third person limited point of view, which is a good choice by itself but starts with a present tense narration, which should be better left in scripts or videogames and not used in a fiction.

The narration at one point shifts from present tense to past tense, making the reader think the author decided to change their style. This is apparently not the case as we soon see the present tense narration resurfacing again.

At first I thought this mishmash of tenses was deliberate and used to slow down the narration during moments with little to no tension and to give a fast pace to action scenes, but this doesn't seem to be the case and the author only appears unable to choose a tense and stick with it.

Other issues with the style of the fictions are its paragraphs, which sometimes seem to be divided in a completely random way, often even having dialogue from two different characters in the same paragraph, and its POV shifts from a character to another, which, while done relatively well, tend to happen in the middle of action, breaking the flow of narration.

Another smaller thing I’d like to note is that the notifications of the system are shown as thoughts, sometimes inside a paragraph, which some people who are used to tables and announcements in bold might not like.

The pace of the story is really fast, even a bit too fast at times, but it is not really an issue.

Story

There isn’t really a lot saying regarding the story, as many fictions on this site and many Japanese webnovels, the story practically consists of random events thrown one after the other at our protagonist and we’re only seeing glimpses of something that could be called a story with the introduction of a possible antagonist many chapters into the story.

Some people like this kind of novels, some don’t, but they tend to be really appreciated on RRL and I personally like them too. Still, in the absence of an actual, apparent, plot, I can’t give more than 3 stars to this section despite the fact that I personally like it.

Grammar

The grammar is average for RRL or a bit above. There are good sections of the story that seem completely free of mistakes and others that are a purpurrì of glaring mistakes.

The most common mistakes are the absence of punctuation or its wrong use, the occasional shift in tense in the middle of a sentence, the switching of possessive pronouns with pronouns+verbs (its/it’s for example), this later case is actually less common than many other novels though so, if that’s what triggers you, you can read somewhat safely.

Another mistake I noticed a couple of times was the mix-up of singulars and plurals, but this happened, as I said, only a couple of times.

Characters

The main character is pretty well made, and we see in her some growth too, mainly in her adapting to the new world and the death of people in front of her. Her wanting to become a doctor is never mentioned during the story after the first time though, and it seems that the convictions that might pushed her down that path played no role at all in either her being a healer or adapting to death.

Still, there is some growth, and the reader feels like they know the main character well after some chapters, though the fast pace of the novel makes it impossible for her growth to be shown more in-depth.

As for the other characters, it’s a bit difficult to judge and they are honestly the main reason for this score, as we see a multitude of characters popping in and out of the narration without any of them becoming a true side character, or even a recurring one, making it impossible to flesh them out well.

Conclusions

The fiction itself is pretty enjoyable but it needs a lot of work, mainly in its style.

For the author: I hope this review hasn’t demoralized you and that it will instead help you improve your writing. I have bookmarked the fiction and I’m looking forward to editing this review once your writing improves.