The Entertainment of the Galaxy

by Immersity

Original HIATUS Action Drama Fantasy Psychological Anti-Hero Lead Grimdark LitRPG Magic Male Lead Strong Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Jensen has grown up knowing of his superiority to others. In all aspects, he was unrivaled. This led him to grow up with an incredibly narcisisstic personality. Unfulfilled in life, Jensen begins to seek excitement in a life of crime. While holding a robbery, Jensen is sucked into a vortex, only to awaken in a crowd of people looking toward a shadowed figure. Will Jensen finally find excitement in the challenge before him?

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There isn't much to read as of yet but i will list a few things that I picked up about this story.

For starters the story is quite fast paced which can be an issue as there is little time to develop the plot and characters.

Also to be frank I don't know where the author is heading with this story, this can be good or bad depending on how the author develops this story.

The characters are rather bland, on one hand you got the narcisstic uberhuman Jensen and on the other you got the goody two shoes Mary, all other characters right now are nothing more than names. The lack of development can be blamed on the lack of chapters, but that is just how it is right now.

 

Grammar and Style are fine but nothing that really stands out - good average which makes it better than most stories on RRL

 

P.S. for the Author : A lot of readers on RRL give stories a 5 star rating if they like it, but that doesn't reflect the stories true quality and i strive to rate stories according to a real rating system instead of "ME LIKE = 5 STARS". So don't be discouraged and keep on writing.