Orb Of Oblivion [Dungeon Story RE-WRITE]

by bearhawk

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Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

DUNGEON STORY

With level ups and many dangerous dungeons. This is a semi-dungeon, semi Litrpg Story

David Lee, an orphan with a lot going for him in life, but unfortunately he died tragically. He was then transported to another world with a blank slate. He finds himself with a mocking title and he also unlocks unique special class that is unknown to this world. 

David Lee is just a ball boy who knows nothing about this dangerous world, he easily trusts others but he will soon know that he had been naive.

So, lets see how his ball handling skills fare in this dungeon filled world!

 

 

 

 

Note:

Reviving this project as I have been away for too long, but first, re-editing and re-writing old chapters.

Old Reviews are basically nulled since I have re-written the story so please feel free to leave behind an updated review of the current story thank you.

 

 

 

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Lucasnox
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Its a slog to read through

It just doesnt flow well at all, the writing feels like a fan translated xianxia novel in how hard it is to parse

i was sort of interested in the story but i just didnt want to deal with the headache of slogging through the writing

Dalton
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the author lied to me

dungeon novels=novels from the pov of the dungeon

it does not mean novels that have dungeons in them

Giants
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I have not given a review in a while, so bear with me. This story is in its early stages but it is shown to be good if not great. It is cliche with the transportation theme, but it does not matter. The best thing about the story currently is the way the author portrays David. He feels like a human and not a robot. Though the character development could use work of how they change, it is still great. I am excited to see how the story pans out. 

Litrpg lover
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The rating is 3 star cause someone didn't read the latest chapters where it becomes a dungeon novel. Just doing a review to help get rid of that 0 star 

WillyH
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Love the previous version

Love the one before..ball power is rare, im hoping someday Mc could cast RASENGAN or Kamehameha. Or maybe pokeball lololololololol. It would be nice if author could release chapter everyday. 5 star mark for u

sbag
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A great dirty joke in the synopsis gets full stars

How will his ball handling skills fare in this dungeon filled world?

 

I haven't read this yet and will rectify that as soon as I get to it. But that made me laugh and for that alone he can have a quick review. I'll update this after I get a chance to give it a read