Adventures of an Old Dreamer

Overall 4,5 - A refreshing story free from the RRL impurities.
Story 4,5/5 - Without a good saga/clear "quest line" the story feels quite pointless, however it's a really well made "slice of life" and worth a try.
Style 4/5 - Easy to read and not so repetitive like many CN works, although there's too much PoV distractions.
Characters 4/5 - There's too much independence here, to the point I believe it's better to give a proper book to each one of the "adventuring trio".
Grammar 5/5 - Nothing to report.

Great story, unique take to the genre, and concious of the flaws in it’s genre and written to correct it.

For this genre, it’s worth 5/5 compared to other stories on novelupdates ect.

There is really just two well developed characters, and it’s the two protagonist. The other characters just do not have enough personality and back story written in a way to make you like them. The side character’s backstory just serve as a way to justify their actions and not in a way to make you care or really like them. 

Just for reference, i only like a few novels and stories on here and novelupdates, and most wuxia and the other genre turn me off due to their 1-D characters.

5/5 on R/R

As a light novel sort, compared to others out there, 3.5-4. 

To be improved:(unless it’s not ur style, and you want this to be more fast paced)

showing more than telling. It’s not a wall of text right now, but can be improved. Have the character interaction, atittude, and dialogue hint at what you wish to tell.

Highlight a positive in a character’s past that makes the reader care for them. We’re not going to invest our emotions on someone who  we do not care for. One of the main reason why I like Overlord is because they make you care for the minor characters, the lizardmen, the hydra, even that one theif who got eaten by Solution who originally wanted to save his sister but life got hard and he resorted to banditry. 

This story Fights against the common Xian Xia novel cookie cutter idea. Most Xian Xia follow a person as they struggle to get to a semblance of strength all the while they fight against people who call them trash and weak. This breaks that mold almost completely. *Synopsis(not spoilery i swear)* It follows a person very quickly through his life until he reaches old age where he finds a book that teaches him about, shocker, Cultivation. The story follows him as he quickly grows to a decent strength and then begins exploring the world. Sounds pretty generic I know.

The most interesting thing about this entire story is, in my opinion about how he goes about dealing with conflict. Up to chapter 26, he doesn't just kill everyone who slights him, he teaches them, spares them, corrects their behavior, forgives them, and occasionally fights people who are hell bent on seeing the end of him. Its not just *ooo* *aaa* you insulted my family its time to die dialogue. He mixes in a sort of self made philosophy about what it means to dream to accomplish something. Truly a breath of fresh air to those who have read Xian Xia, and an example of a good Xian Xia to anyone new to them.

I give it 4 1/2 simply because while I love this story, it does have a few errors every now and then, one or two plot holes but nothing major enough to mention. The spelling errors are few and far between and usually corrected pretty quickly so if you’re a grammar nut then this shouldn’t be too bad.

Plot wise, it has a tendency to wander but I think that’s intentional, and in its own kind of adds to the charm. The characters, while ridiculous, are believable enough as opposed to the usual “I am powerful therefore fear me” and “young master samaaaaaa” that we commonly get.

Keep it up my friend, and I will continue reading. I wish you the best.

I'm actually shocked by the number of really good review on this novel, it is not a bad novel, but it is in no way the "great" novel people make it out to be.

The progression is confusing and unchallenging for the MC, we see him go from zero to hero in 4-5 chapters tops. The few fight are awkward and unfun to read about, a friendship is develloped in litteraly a single chapter and they are the best of friends already, the foreshadowing about the barrier and the expert of his country is very badly done.

The MC is also way too forgiving and accepting, i suppose this is intentional but it is overdone and when you add that to the cringy/more or less badly done interaction it takes away from the rest of the story.

The power spike was so sudden the reader doesnt have the time to get a feel for the power scale of your world, there is also the fact that your mc is a Mary Sue of cultivation encountering 0 difficulties whatsoever and the few he encounters are irrelevant or a setup for a instant arbitrary powerup.

Now even with everything said there is still potential as this is clearly a rough first draft, it should also be fairly easy to edit/rewrite the bad parts in the future when your skills have grown.

Im somewhat confused i thought i aleady rated your story but it seems i didnt post it for some reason.

To the story i really like it i feel right at home with it its comparable to many popular xanxia and wuxia over at wuxiaworld. Its fresh and your absolutly right novels like Martial God Asura, Against the Heavens, Coiling dragon, Desolate Era, Perfect World, I shall Seal the Heavens, Swallowed Star, Book eating magician, its always about a youth walking to glory sure hardship, woman and treasure make most of the allure for it but in the end they are all so similar to each other some like atg and mga where mc is sometimes a complete douche and chases every woman with above average beauty even building harems seems the norm.

It gets tiring to always read about the same overall scheme and your story is really refreshing instead of a young boy or even more a child its a old dude who lived his life mundane but kept a young heart its inspiring after the first few chapters i instantly associated with the mc i even thought when i grow old i should never forget to dream its inspiring.

I love the story i like the addition of his nascent soul beeing independent completly novel in any wuxia i ever read never seen something similar and her even becoming his daughter i love. Even though you added to her many hidden talents an heavenly potential which falls back into schema F its forgiveable and in the end at its core thats the reason we love wuxia so much power fantasies and such.

If i didnt know its a fan writen story at many points i completly forgot im on royal road and associated your story to the professional translators over at ww.

Now lets talk about the storys short comming after so many honey'd words some salt is neccesary grammar is somewhat lacking but good compared to most other novels here on rr you definitly need a proofreader or a second one if you have already one if you search for grammar errors too long you become blind for them its normal and happens to everyone, so a second pair of eyes is always a good choice also called peer review.

Story has its ups and downs start was stellar i litteraly got starry eyes after i read your first few chapters after that its a normal low story progression  and such. the part where he was in the village you could have made him fight some minor troubles or something else in my opinion wasted potential there. The part in the froest was also nice the fight of those two core formation experts again wasted potential as he regenerated the forest again and i remind you part of the allure are "unforeseen consequences and hidden encounters" he could have caught the attention of a hidden entity which you can casually integrate into the story later ads some mystery.

The city ark was ok but it seemed to miss something not sure what, your story your imagination.

The rest of the story is still in developement and its fine rome wasnt build in one day.

So for the end i hope i addressed the major things i thought could change and forgive me if i forgot some story parts its already one or two weeks since i read your story. A tipp from a bored writer with regular writers block plan your story in with a rough outline major events and major charakters 10 chapters in advance if you dont its easy to write yourself into a dead end and you dont want to go back and rewrite major parts of your story jsut to make it plausible again alot of wasted brain power and time with that.

A wish from my side if you encounter a writers block anounce it and dont endlessly excuse yourself like many do tell us especially me :D so i am not so disapointed for checking the third consecutive week with no meanigfull update. I wish you many interessting thoughts and a good flow for your future chapters even if you quit now i wont forget what you wrote and will incorporate similar ideas into my own storys in the future.

I wish you a good day and btw im german pls excuse my horrendous grammar XD.

This story is super fast paced for Xianxia.  Everything that would take 200 chapters in a typical Xianxia happens in 10 chapters.  This has both positive and negative aspects.  A huge part of the negatives are the lack of logical character progression, which makes the 5 main characters flat. 

   One MC has huge psychological trauma which she immediately overcomes to become the most decisive and ruthless character in less than a chapter. 

   On the plus side, there are no fillers ar all.  No excessive crowd jeering to fill out fight scenes.  All of the young masters are logically placed.  Etc.

Suggestion for improvement:  Take the time to write a character sheet for each MC and Antagonist with an extensive bio.  Use this as a reference to write an extensive background bio.  Pick out 5 key traits of each character and stay true to those traits while guiding their growth. 

   Avoid sudden leaps in growth as much as possible, and save critical breakthroughs for dramatic moments.  

These 2 things can help with pacing the story and directing towards needed sub-plots.

I am almost caught up with the latest release, and I have to say that I have found your story to be one of the best stories I have read on RR. Everything about the story is fresh and revolutionary for a genre that has become cut and dry. I'm very happy to have stumbled upon this series, and I look forward to your future releases with bated breath. 

It is really nice to have a story like yours so you better continue as you are. I would say that your story is truly a dream come true ! *wink wink*

The story is quite good while its not a perfect masterpiece it has good cast characterisation and intresting ideas. (independent Nascent Soul and Soul Dragon) but it has some problems sutch as absurd cultivation speed and his dislike for normal Xianxia plot elements being too obvious and in your face sometimes.

Good thing he aknowliges that and has asked for help to improve. So give him feedback in his chapter comments or go to his discord listed on Ch.21 if you want to bee more involved in his story improvement. (you might even become beta reader on discord)