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"Will there ever be a world of peace?"

This question rings across the continent for generations, until it is heard by one.

This tale follows, the one who will usher the world into an era of prosperity and peace.
The only one who is capable.

The ambitious, the illustrious.

Minamoto Yama.

 

 

 

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Kazushi Tetsuo

Kazushi Tetsuo

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FlowingTime
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Good english, nice flow to the story. Has that "embrace the dark" to see the light type of thing going which was a nice twist to the usual and had a really nice intro to the world. Only a few chapters so can't say much but has potential!

Dupi
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I was just looking through stories to past the time, and I'm glad I found this gem. I like how your portrayal of the characters, the base conflicts and backgrounds for them as well. I'm interested to see how it goes from here.

6ixSageItachi
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I really like the ninja story, there aren't very many and there aren't any done like this. There are only a few chapters so far but it's really interesting and compelling. Nothing bad to say so far, hope you keep it up!

lemuelmoo
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I like the prologue and how it transits to Chapter 1. You really gave alot of thought to your idea and I see that you did do extensive research into what you want to do.

I think a few more chapters more will give a better idea of what you want your readers to experience. Keep at it!

 

Alphadragon
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 👍👍👍👍☺ nice story 

Small grammar mistakes 

Can improve plot line in beginning 

 

ArcanePunkster
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Its Okay, But I Have Issues With It...

Seeing as there's not much to go by, I can't really say much.

The grammar is good except for a few hiccups here and there, and the style is interesting.

However I'm getting too many vobes of Naruto at the moment with the ninja clans, jutsu, hidden power within the MC, and jutsu styles I found it hard reading this and trying not to of it a Naruto story. At the moment the connection between the ninjas and the Demons, Goddesses and Spirits are so slim that it doesn't help distinguish this story to be its own thing.

If you release a few a more chapters then maybe I'll be able to get a better understanding of this story and where you're trying to go with it.

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