The Genesis System

by ProfoundMagician

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Strategy Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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Genesis. It is the end of countless stories. The end of thousands of universes, billions of planets, and trillions of lives. But what is taken may also be given, as shown in the story of Cael King. A young man of Earth, knowing only a life of study and work in the relentless and endless pursuit of satisfaction. This is the origin of his story.

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Inspired by the system used in The Legend of Randid.ly Ghosthound. The system is an homage but the characters, world, and story are unique. I will post as often as I can and, given that I am not starting work until July, that should be pretty frequently. If you have any suggestions or comments please feel free to leave them as this is my first story and I'd love to improve both it and my writing style.

This is my Patreon. Please join if you'd like to read a few chapters ahead and be part of an interactive community

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Ringostrauss
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Only downside is the writer just started.

This is well written, and while certainly this type of story has been done before, it is being done well here, and with enough originality that I can't wait to see where the author is going.  Thanks and good luck on your journey.

Edit: Having read a bit more, this is becoming one of my favorite stories period on Royal Road. Always keep us guessing :)

Toc
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At the moment there are seven chapters. I really like this story so far, it reminds me of "A Novel World" but seems faster paced which is nice. Although the story is new, I read nothing that seemed annoying or tedious. This easily made it into my favorites list.

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DrSupbro
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Promising (Updated as of 7/1/18)

 This is a well written story that brings a sense of enjoyment to the reader like a good story should. Some inspiration has been taken from The Legend of Randidly Ghosthound in the term of paths, but nobody ever said an idea of paths was solely only allowed to be used by that story. It fits well with this story, and the original content is definitely there. 

The story itself is interesting, but nothing new to royalroad. At this point in time, originality is really hard to come by, so it is up to the author to make their story enjoyable. They could write the most cliche story, but if they add new things and put twists in there, it will leave the reader satisfied. Gensis does just this. An MC being stuck in a dungeon and having to power level with a game interface and classes in a world of magic+monsters after being transmigrated is nothing new. However, the presentation and little twists make the story just so enjoyable. 

I really wish this story had been going on for a year or so just to have that huge stockpile of chapters I would be able to dive right into, but believe me when I say that I will closely follow this one. It looks like it'll only get better. 

7/1/18

So, once our MC came back from his dungeon world and arrived to Earth, things got a bit eh with the story. It seemed like it was going to become kind of boring because Cael was acting rather stupid. However, it seems like the author intentionally made it so and is progressing his character with the new realizations of the MC. 

The story seems like it will be going in a very good direction, and may hit a five star mark, but for now and how so so the story is compared to before, I'm just going to keep a closer eye on it to see how it does. The recent introduction of future characters was rather generic, but we'll see how that ends up going.

The story is definitely worth a read. 

Psyren1596
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This is actually really good. The premise is not new, however the author add his own unique twist to it. I especially like Faul, he reminds me of Kisame from Naruto. 

The story style is great, and I have picked up little to no grammatical mistakes. 

Daniel Vickerman
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Turned bad very quickly after the return to earth.

The first fourty chapters are a pretty good grindy litrpg but once he comes back to earth things go downhill rapidly. It's been only fifteen days and yet everyone seems to have adapted and installed dictators. There is a stupid subplot about people hating and fearful of randomly selected people (which he is), stupid character motivations, bad mistakes (lying to his parents when they will find out in several days) and bad dialogue, along with several boring choices plot choices. 8 earth chapters convinced me to drop this story because they were so bad and bland. 

Aubis97
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Easily the best story I've seen on royal road recently. Really impressed with how the story is progressing.

geffen.nir
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This one is a hidden gem, with a rapidly developing story, and interesting world building.

I just wish the author would spend less time mentioning gains and focusing on the game mechanics and more on the characters.

That said, it's a good read, very well written and highly enjoyable :)

Leareth
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I like this one ecen more than Ghosthound. Clearly influenced by it, but original and brilliant.

Bored monster
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I honestly loved it. The story was well thought out and executed. Some things felt a bit forced but at least an explanation was given out.

* The way his mentor JUST happened to explain his plans because he was excited.

Still it's worth read.

Futhark the Elder
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Although there are some similarities between the system of attributes, skills, and ways (paths) in this story and the obscurely complex system of the well-known Randidly Ghosthound, the current protagonist has a very different personality (and, frankly, a much more likeable one). This gives the present story a sufficiently original flavour.

I also like the way in which increasing an attribute in this story has immediately perceptible effects whereas in RG the effects are frustratingly diffuse.

Confession: I began this story with misgivings and yet by chapter 5 was addicted. The author has the rare gift of storytelling.

This brings us to style. The author uses the sustained first person present tense. Generally speaking, the sustained use of present tense is a disaster, usually perpetrated by over-ambitious undergraduates to the despair of their teachers, who may find it difficult to grade their essays without sips of a malted strengthening agent. However, the present author manages to avoid the awkwardnesses that bedevil the present-tense style, a remarkable feat for which he deserves congratulations even as we quirk our eyebrows at his choice.

Finally, I love the author’s intelligent use of epigraphs. The 20th century’s greatest writer of English prose, Jack Vance, was a master of the epigraph — to such an extent that Baron Bodissey, a character known only via quotations from his Encyclopedia, became for many readers a favourite. I shall look forward to the clever world-building of the epigraphs.