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Since the late 19th Century, humanity has been pushing itself at a breakneck pace towards a single convergence of technology and development. Estimated to occur in the mid 2020's, this pivotal moment is commonly referred to as the Singularity. After five years of research, college student Adrian Pierce manages to crack the code first and create the world's first robust artificial intelligence in the year 2016. Disgusted by society as it is, especially governing bodies, he decides to use his unique position to alter the tenuous balance that greed and corruption had given birth to. With his extraordinary mind, Adrian plots and plans, designing new technologies with his assistant A.I., becoming secretly embroiled in the world of politics, subterfuge, and research. As his influence increases, governments and the general populace alike scramble to discover just who the man behind Archon Industries really is.

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Jtqx
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Definitely Worth Reading

This is probably the only Sci-Fi with a mature undertone that is realistic enough on RR. Nothing too fantastical, just extrapolation which I greatly approve of. Personally, I’m hoping that it continues this way, without any cliché events. Character wise, the MC, Adrian, seems to be a well fleshed out character, mature in all aspects and he also seems to have a past which I assume will be explored as the story progresses. 

That said, the AI does seem to be “overpowered” at the moment, and it would be a better plot if there are opposing forces. I’m assuming though that this will be introduced as the story progresses as so far, the stage is still being set. 

Assuming that there will be romance, which the tags said there would, I hope the romance factor doesn’t diminish the plot, and that the “heroine” won’t be a one-dimensional character often seen in original novels posted here.

Nevertheless, based on the current chapters, this has great potential, with both good English and plot. Definitely worth a read.

Vitanima
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Writing this review because of Spons'

First of all, I hate the discrimination of “wish-fulfillment” stories. They should just be counted as their own genre now and not get so many negative reviews for what they are. They are stories designed for escapism and daydreaming. Although escapism is bad in general, taken in portions is a enjoyable way to pass time. Not everyone wants to read a “realistic” drama with love triangles and other shit that might throw the reader for a loop. 

Another thing, there has been little to no romance so far, the only girl that has shown obvious signs of liking the MC is his ex-gf but thats part of her backstory. The main heroine so far has been kinda iffy on what she wants. 

 

 

Ps. Look up quantum computing, and what it could do towards making a very intelligent AI. Research is fairly close to what could be achieved in this story. The only unrealistic thing is how smart the MC is to make that sort of thing by himself.

 

Thats my rant over

Rubixxcube
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Read it. It's truly great. The grammar is perfect,  the story is fantastic  and there was just no flaw I could find. 

 

You won't be disappointed. 

Ultrabenosaurus
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Not gonna lie, I wanna be the MC of this

This story and its MC basically put my views of and desires for the world into an entertaining bundle of words. I've been called cynical most of my life, and maybe I am, but Bearcat is at least able to comprehend my worldview, otherwise he wouldn't have been so capable of using it as this story’s setting. The MC, too, is basically the guy I want to be in life – everyone has their fantasy about what they’d do if X technology existed or they were born into the same shoes as Y from that one show.

 

On top of being drawn into the setting and MC so much, the style it’s written in is very enjoyable and flows well. Mostly we follow Adrian, being the MC, while at times we jump to some other character but it just feels right, unlike some other fics I've read on RRL where the PoV switch was quite unexpected or simply not written well. The pacing is very smooth, and the way we're shown the situation expertly balances the narrow view of a single character with extra details to hint at a bigger picture. The spelling and grammar are also top-notch, it really wouldn't surprise me in the slightest if this is in the Top 5 of all RRL fics for grammar – the only reason I haven’t given it full marks is because I don’t trust myself to have not missed any small errors with how engrossed I get when reading things I enjoy.

 

The characters are the only real problem I have with this so far. Don’t get me wrong, they’re all excellent. The PoVs we've had of the non-MC charas worked nicely and gave us a wonderful insight into their minds and add much appreciated depth to the story. The relationships between them slowly became revealed and continue to play out quite naturally, too, which is one of the hardest aspects of writing a fic IMO. That said, we've only been given a tiny glimpse into the actual backgrounds of maybe 2 or 3 of the important characters so far, which seems odd given the state of the plot as of chapter 18. Besides the fact that the majority of the cast we've been introduced to so far are college buddies, we know very little about their pasts or why they ended up with the resolution to go through with what they're about to start. Maybe this is on purpose and it’ll be gradually revealed as Bearcat keeps writing? Maybe it really is something he overlooked? Who knows?

 

But I’ll keep reading, and you should too.

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Definitely quality Royalroadl material, but wouldn't read otherwise

The reason that I'm writing this is that this story definitely is the "cream of the crop" when compared to many, many other stories on this website. One of the few that isn't considered outright trash. Definitely better than some stories on the current top 5 right now (I'm looking at you, Maou summoning). But then again, I'm really saddened that the author fucked this one up. 

There are numerous points in this story that strike me as plainly distasteful, but let me start off with the glaring problem in the story: the protagonist, or the "MC".

 

As is customary with stories on this website, he's a Gary Stu male powerfantasy. He is "ultra smart" (not really, if we'd have to judge his intelligence by way of his actions in the story), "super handsomee"(self-insert much?), "a gentleman"(I'm imagining a fat neckbeard with a fedora creepily whispering "m'lady" into my ears) with a set of twisted morals the author attempts to justify and a world filled to the brim with stupid people so that the author can let him loose and do whatever he wants. We've got one antithesis to our protagonist so far, but I'm betting that he'll be either insignificant or always be behind the protagonist one step, just to make our "MC" seem cooler.

 

Other characters in this story are literally  introduced in, the author just shoves them in your face and talks a little about their backstory. What irks me especially is the "damsel in distress", that has to fall in love with our protagonist here, and just happens to be a Mary Sue herself. I can't believe how shallow her character is and how she is just introduced into the story for absolutely no reason at all! At least introduce her later on in the story intertwined with the events that make for a 'fateful encounter', instead of just shoving her into the story just because you need the romance tag.

 

But that's enough ranting. I've always been unsure what "Style" is supposed to be judged when doing reviews, but this story isn't Shakespearean in any way. The author writes in a direct way, and he either avoids flowery language(which is good), or just doesn't use it. 5/5.

 

So how about the story? The concept of a whiz-kid getting super powers by inventing lots of stuff isn't new. I haven't really read any other story that does it the way the author does, but so far we haven't really gone too deep into the story yet. I'll pass judgement on this until it's completed(if it ever is).

 

Grammar is superb. No, it is not "it's really good for Royalroadl standards", it's just actually good. No obvious errors, so that's an automatic 5/5.

 

Characters .5/5. As for reasons explained above.

 

Average score without the story factored in is 3.5/5 stars.

 

addendum:

"Author’s Note: This fiction is a brainchild of action, fantasy, Sci-Fi, and RPG elements. No idiot anime shounen heroes relying off of luck here, folks."

Ironic considering the protagonist is layered with immaculate perfection, which serves as a good excuse for some good ol' plot armour(read: luck). 

Also, unlike our Adrian here, shounen protagonists have flaws, struggle with emotional distress (Adrian, Gary Stu that he is, can turn that off! Wowzers, how cool!) and human relationships (Aah! Save me, superior super-handsome gentleman! No probs, m'lady. Let me leave a note that makes me seem cool and mysterious first.<- this story) that aren't one-dimensional (wow, I just met a super handsome dude in this store, let me get really, REALLY involved in his life and sex him up and shit (for no reason) ).But then again, do humans really need reason to explain their actions? A lot of the times we do shit on a whim, and I guess the author can use that to justify his painfully boring characters.

 

I'm expected to get hated for this, so go ahead.

patlıcan
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Starting point of the story is good, but goes downhill from there.

Another failure to create a smart character. As is the norm on web novels, when the author tries to create a very smart main character, they fail miserably. The character is supposed to be smart but most of his actions show the opposite in a lot of occasions. Instead of making the main character smart, they just make everyone around stupid in order to make the main character seem smart and get away with things he should not have. I will just give one example of this: character saves a couple of girls from a pedophile and continues to torture and murder the man who is a US senator iirc. The girls just walk out of the hotel and supposedly go to their home with the taxi money he gave them. How did the girls get there? Did a senator just walk into a hotel with two 13 year-old girls and went on to rape them in a room? Did they come by themselves? Why? How did the senators get a hold of them? Were they kidnapped? Where are their kidnappers then, did they just left them? What was the senator going to do with them afterwards? There are a lot more plot holes in just this one situation then I’d care to count here. And there are quite a few similar situations. This supposed “super evil one percent evil organization of child kidnappers” appear to be running the dumbest crime syndicate to ever exist and get away with it. No wonder this average smart main character would look smart in this fictional world.

 

Story is unnecessarily and untastefully dark. I like dark stories, but there must be some meaning to make it so dark. The dark side of this story just comes off as cheesy.

 

The main plot of the story and its starting point is pretty cool. <Inventing the first real A.I. and going for world domination to make the world “better” > is a good starting base and a cool idea for a dark story that points out modern society’s rotten insides. The execution just goes downhill from there on for the story unfortunately.

 

Grammar is good for a web novel. Definitely much better than average of the site. Good job on that.

Nazgand
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Just some awesome guy's diary

As anyone could figure out from the fact that the story is set in present day, and from the fact that the author shares a name with the MC, and from the fact that both the MC and the author previously studied law, but later went into technology, we can easily deduce that this is Bearcat's personal diary. The reason chapters haven't been released for the past 5 months is obviously because Bearcat has many much more interesting, awesome, and important things to do than writing his diary.

Luckily for us readers, Bearcat's life is simply epic, will go down in history, and is a sneak peek of products that will eventually come to market unless they become obsolete before being produced.

TLDR: Read it!

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Great Work - highly recommended

I’m normally not a Sci-fi fan, but the title caught my eye (due to Starcraft lol). I enjoyed reading through the 12 chapters. I would expect this to rise to the top soon.

 

Style – Love the style. There is multiple POVs. Interactions are interesting. Slightly technical in some areas, but understandable.

 

Story – Great groundwork. Very interesting in it’s potential. I feel like this story may be quite short (i.e., <50 chapters), and it would be fine that way. It’ll be amazing if you can pull of >50 chapters while keeping it interesting i.e., not introducing random things like fighting with aliens, monsters from another realm, etc.

 

Grammar– Didn’t catch any mistake. If there is any, it doesn’t jump out.

 

Character – Characters are not completely one-sided and feel natural. I like your idea of vigilante. MC would probably confront the FBI, which is supposedly the good guys.

 

You introduced stats in earlier chapters, but it seems like they’re no longer important.

 

 

-I’ll update this review after more chapters.

sclaudiu
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It's simply put beautiful.One of the best stories i've ever read on this site.I would love to see it go official some time later if the author wishes,he definitely has the potential .
Now for some constructive criticism: there isn't much so say here expect sometimes it feels like your timeskipping too much,limiting your character growth and fluent storytelling for the sake of action scenes or something that plays a major role in the story(like the base or the 'sex trade co.').If you wish to timeskip for the sake of it,don't just say '3 months later' because it says 'hey i have nothing more interesting to say and look there a action scene its gonna happen'  .And don't think that you will bore your reader with prep plans and character interactions.This is my only advice for you author...no more timeskipping  (since english  isn't my primary language i can't go into more fluent explanations,if it was my native language i would've bored you to death with my ramblings).Cheers mate

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Good, but kind of a waste

When I first started reading this story, it seemed like it was going to be really interesting.  MC invents an A.I. and they are going to change the world.  I thought it was going to be about gaining power through science and technology, cool inventions, similar to Ell Donsaii, if you have read that series.  Unfortunately, the MC quickly turns into a sociopath, and this story becomes a series of chapters about him killing various evil people.  Just like half the stories on this site.  Lost interest after chapter 11.